I'm staring up at a world
That seems to keep on living
Even though I don't
I watch from a skull
That no longer has eyes to see with
And no tongue for speaking with
Why did this world hate me so much
That I have been cast away
Even without a stone as a reminder
That I am gone
I'm staring up from the bottom of an unmarked grave
Forced to watch a world that has forgotten me
I wasn't even worth a gravestone
With three simple words engraved
"Here
Lies
Me".
Author notes
I wrote this because of my godfather. I've actually been holding this in for a while, but when he died, my family didn't have the money to get him a headstone, and we still don't. So this is what I wrote.
A contest entry
- Another Poetry Contest by Melissa Loves Jeffy.
500 points, ended February 21, 2008, 16 entries
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Comments
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Thats so sad. When you get some money you should buy him one. Remember tho... He is not forgotten because you still remember. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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This is a powerful piece of poetry. It is quite sad, yet conveys much through the words. Nicely done!
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Wow this is very deep and well-written. Keep it up, by the way, the title is also really good.
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aww thats really sad =[ this was realy powerful and it "touched"/"moved" me in a way.... it was really well written.
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Awww..so sad.this was such a great poem. really emotional and you have a good way with words. you express his feelings of being unwanted and everything so well. i feel so bad for the character. and the thing about your uncle, wow, that must be hard, how horrable, but as long as you remember him i'm sure he doesn't feel forgotten or unwanted. but anyway, great job, i loved it so much. keep up the great work!
--greeneyes
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oooooooooooooooook! I read the whole thing wow. This was totally awesome. It really expresses the feelings of a person unwanted. It's a really good piece... I feel anger in it, and sympathy for the character. GOod Job!!!!
ok, i forgot to read the author notes... oh gosh... this is really sad to know that this is a poem that is supposed to be so personnal. Now I'm gonna say Awesome Job!!
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Wow...
This is amazing. It's way better then anything I could ever think of writing.
I love it...And it's meaning. That's really sad about your godfather.
Well that's what I think ^^ ~*Alice -
wow. and u talk about my poems being dark. lol. i love it and u should write so more like this one. ttul.
♠Punk
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