Terror In Mercuria

Chapter 1 - Challenge1

I'd heard so many rumors...2

Mercuria, the place I live, isn't exactly what you'd call a slum. It's actually a bustling corporate metropolis of cellphones and powerwalks... except for this one sector cut off to the general public.3

This city had to be at least four hundred years old, and tales flew about how in this deserted sector, the looming tower that stood had once housed a demented sorcerer who captured the townspeople, performing sick experiments on them, and enslaving their corrupted souls for necromantic rituals...4

But that was all false, as far as I thought.5

So, why should I have been scared when some of my school friends dared my best friend, Angelique, and I to slip under the laser tape barrier around the spire and stay the night inside? There was no danger, as no one, not even the police, bothered to step inside that almost sacred ground. We'd be safe, and we'd make an easy fifty off of those friends, only problem would be boredom... but what if?6

"A stupid question," I thought to myself, as Angelique and I stepped under the boundary so thin and found ourselves dwarfed by the monolith before us.7

"...you first?" my friend tentatively whispered. Taking the hint, I grabbed her hand and rushed into the eight-foot door in front of us. It was dark, dank, and smelled like old fish... silence hung in the air like a murderer in Chicago, until we heard the screams...8

Chapter 2 - Taut Wire9

The first, a shriek of pained agony which seemed to come from a woman upstairs, caused me to jump back into Angelique.10

"Lia, watch it!" she cried, but we fell backwards anyway... into a shut door.11

Tension hung in the air as we both turned slowly to look upon the closed exit.12

"...Ange, did you do that?" I stammered, shaking with fear. My response was a terrifyingly silent shake of her head, and my worst fears were confirmed... but there was still a doubt, a reasonable explanation, right?13

Ten minutes of pulling on, screaming at, and ramming into the incredibly heavy and thick oaken portal later, all doubts had been erased.14

We both collapsed into two plush armchairs near the door, coughing from the maelstroms of dust that came forth, and pondered our situation. We were still safe... weren't we?15

Chapter 3 - Snap16

"This isn't funny!!!"17

My hands sore from pounding the huge barrier keeping us from freedom, I walked into the center of the foyer and leaned on a large armored knight, tears starting to trickle down my slightly dusted cheeks.18

"Calm down, Lia, it's probably just the kids trying to spook us out!" 19

As she tried to calm me down, to no avail, I can assure you, Angelique stealthily stalked to the door and tried to peer through the cobwebbed and dirt-caked window, but it was no use.20

I turned away from the coldly comforting golem before me and, wiping the tears from my eyes, let out a scream so purely angry, it rang throughout the airy hall for minutes after.It looked like once again, we were stuck here until morning, but still safe.21

At least... until I heard the sounds.22

Author notes

It's like they say, keep 'em hanging! #5 was my choice, hope it's up to snuff! I *may* continue, depends on your comments

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  • Novae
    August 6, 2004
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    Awwwww! ^^ Thank you! I'm glad my work affected you... but don't poo yourself. :/

  • unsexypenguin
    August 6, 2004
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    EEEEEKKKKKK! Yea I Refuse To Read Anything Like This Ever Again This Early While I'm Home Alone. Good Job You Scared Me!


  • tieed
    August 2, 2004
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    NICE

    Bum bum buum~ hehe alright necromantic rituals rock hehe book of the dead all the way! Anyhow this is cool and i think you should branch out on it cuz it has alot of pontenital yup yup great great!

  • Diseased Mind
    August 2, 2004
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    want more!!!

    wow! this is great! You must continue! I need to know more. I desperately want to see another chapter. Please!!!!! Good luck in the contest!


  • August 2, 2004
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    this is very good and yes yes please another chapter would be nice so please write another .
    Pendragon

  • Novae
    August 2, 2004
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    Heh heh, free day tomorrow, I'll write like mad! *hugs*


  • poet girl
    August 2, 2004
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    Me too me too, I want to Stay tuned... I'll be waiting. really great write. pen on, poet.

  • CodeNameCassie
    August 2, 2004
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    So far, so good. A continuation would be really cool because you started off real well and it kept me hooked. I want to know what will happen when they spend the night!

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