Fleeting Light

Try so hard to find the light

Some people give in and chose not to fight

But take my hand and let my try

To show you how, show you why

Life is worth living, give it a shot

But when you do, give it all you got

With waging war's and closed off doors

This life is like a cloud that always pours

Open your eyes to the world’s real beauty

And when you do, come and find me

So I can lead you into a whole new way

That gives you a purpose, every day

To help and fix this polluted world

To help make more fists uncurled

These words seem scattered on a page

Like it’s hiding all the rage

Trust me its not, this is just a chance

To dance’s with life’s tricky dance

And look past all of the horror and hate

Hurry, before it’s too late

And all the light has gone for good

As people always said it would

~Fin.

Author notes

This poem is a lot about how I think a lot of people need to look past all the horrible-ness and evil thats in our world and try to make it a better place simply by being a better person.
People are always acting so sad and miserable because of the hand that life dealt them ut it's my opinion that it the try, and if they look with eyes that dont judge they can see how lovely life really is.
Yeah, Life's a total suckfest, but if you dont try to change it, It's only horrible because of you.

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  • JuliaAlexandrovna
    July 27, 2007

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    Wow. This almost seemed religious, whether you meant it that way or not. I like it. And it's totally true. I think that if we all can learn to forgive, the world will become a better environment that is suitable for life and not death.

    x Julez


  • Mel-the-Believer
    July 26, 2007
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    Amen! I loved this. This was so true. Makes you wonder, what if everyone took the time to say, smell the flowers. This was really good, I really loved it. I mean I know for me I've had some not so great things happen, but they happened and I live, I'm here and grateful for it. Life's too short to graze over with a frown. Wonderful poem. God Bless!


  • Taylor Renee
    July 26, 2007

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    To dance’s with life’s tricky dance

    I just thought that would be better "To dance through life's tricky dance," only because to dance with life's tricky dance seemed kind of confusing to me

    That is the only critisizm I have on the entire piece. And I'm in one of my moods. That's great!

    I loooved the flow of this poem, and it was written really beautifully.
    But what I loved was what you talked about! It was terrific, and meaningful and beautiful.

    I really loved this. You did amazing.

    Thank you so much for entering my contest, great entry and good luck!

    xoxo
    tay


    • miss keara
      July 26, 2007
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      n.n
      Thats a whole bunch.
      I really appreciate that!!
      =]]
      You just totally made my day
      ♥Keara