I miss the hurt that I could just wrap around me like a big security blanket. Now I just have a lump of cloths that needs washing. I never really thought that it would all happen this way. You were with me and I was with you. All romantic and movie-like. Except it wasn't romantic at all. You were just one big contradiction weren't you? With your rose, dyed blue, that you always pinned so elegantly to my chest. Then you'd give me the finger and fall into your sullen mood. I didn't need that and neither did you.1
I personally think I did us a favour. I did it in a way that wouldn't hurt me. Mostly just you. People always drop that line "it's not you it's me" but this time it was true. It was me who made the laundry and I should clean it up. The only problem with my little crime was that you couldn't be here to see me wash it. With a push of a button I'm going to wash away you and wash away what you got on me. Soon all that will be left is that spot on the wall. I can easily clean that up too. Mr. Clean is not your friend today Kris, now is it? 2
I bet you think I'll get caught and sent to the place you got thrown into every night. Nope, that won't happen to me. I'm going to wash you away too. Right down the river where you tried to kiss me after the hurt you wished me. All I have to do is push you and that will be easy too. You didn't make as big an impact on me as you thought.3
So I'm going to wash this away and we will never speak again. I already said good-bye the first time I met you so this is starting to sound repetitive. You never liked that either. Only one thing to do now and I did it already. The cloths with you on them are spinning away. I think I'm just going to leave and take care of whatever dishes are in the sink so I better turn the lights off and close the laundry door. You never liked to waste energy. 4
Author notes
About a relationship that ended badly. VERY, VERY BADLY. If you read it you can probably see what I'm talking about.
PS: People structure is not me thing so if the story sucks tell me.
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What was this? anyway, I'm using your poems for my project and you can't stop me. ^_^ i'll call you later
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this was presented very uniquely, i liked it oodles. the flow is great, and everything you had to say. one small thing, i believe cloths should be clothes... other than that, i really enjoyed this. i especially like " i didn't need that and neither did you." how true. some of it was a bit esoteric, but of course it wasn't meant for the world to understand every little inside reference, just the person you wrote it too. this was excellent.
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this is so cool - not read anything on this subject the way you presented, before. i like. i think most of the time, there are rare times, when we break up with someone there is a lot of pain and that pain is turned into hurting the other. sad but i fel it is true. i hope you are feeling okay as i write these words - a smile to you either way
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This is the nice thing about poetic license and freedom of creativity.. style is in the eye of the beholder... Yours was flippant and catchy. Not difficult to read at all, in fact it flowed well. You brushed him off good and proper!
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I don't think it sucks. This was kinda sad with a twist of angst and a whole lot of emotion. Ending a relationship with someone we loved really sucks and hurts like hell! The best way is to walk away and dont look back...I hope your feeling better and move on with your life soon...Great poem
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