My life

To be alone, with nothing to do,

everyones joy see right through you.

The funny side it what people see,

but not the scars all over me.

You see the comedy,

but can you feel the tragedy?

Theres lot more then what meets the eye,

I will bleed, but never cry.

My skin cant feel pain,

my skin cant feel the rain.

Now I see what to do,

lock away from all of you.

I keep to myself,

so keep your wealth.

Im fine alone,

even bitter to the bone.

I know out there I can survive,

but if I leave, it wont be alive.

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Like Siby I doubt this is what you want. But I did my best. And if I could sum my life up in one word it'd me lonely.

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  • Taylor Renee
    July 24, 2007
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    Wow. This was beautiful;, in a very sad and bittersweet way.
    It almost made me want to cry.
    The rhyme scheme WAS really good ^.^
    I think the poem was written very well, and you did a great job. It IS was I wanted
    Just a little bit of your life in one piece. You did perfect.
    great job, thank you so much for entering my contest, and best of luck!
    xoxo
    Tay


  • asthray.heart
    July 23, 2007

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    This was really good, had alot of emotion and well yer it says about your name

    Loved it Osa, keep it up.


  • Siby Anan
    July 23, 2007
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    This is just so sad and has such great emotions running through it. I liked the rhyme scheme, it added a touch of sincerity to it. You really used some interesting sentences in there, I've never actually seen you that way; though I do understand your pain sometimes, when we talk.

    Good luck in the contest ^_~

    Love,
    Ziby♥


  • JuliaAlexandrovna
    July 23, 2007

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    I like how you tied your penname into your life like that. And I'm sorry you've been lonely. *hugs*

    x Julez

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