His name was Chris and he was deeply in love with a girl. She was the only one who ever understood him, the only one who could bring a smile to his face when in tears, and the only one he knew he could trust, and he loved her for this. Her name is Dara, and she loves Chris for the same reasons he loved her. The only thing Chris never told her was that he was a vampire. Chris was afraid of losing her love because of this so he never said a word and hid from her his dark secret. One night Chris decided he had to tell her..1
Chris sat shaking in the dark movie theater with Dara trying to figure out how to tell her. Chris thought to himself, *Will she still love me? Will she run and tell? NO! Dara loves me and she would never do such a thing! Damnit.. How do I tell her? She will think either I'm kidding or I've gone insane. What do I say? Fuck..*2
Dara gentaly put her hand on Chris's shoulder. "Chris? Your shaking, whats the matter? Are you okay?...Chris?"3
Chris felt a pain in his gums, then in his stomach. *FUCK! Its happening! Not here, not now! I need to get out of here, I need blood..* Chris stood up without looking at Dara. "I need to go now. I'm sorry." Chris ran as fast as he could out of the theater. Now he was in a dark place behind the theater trying to find a rabbit or a cat or even a rat, he didn't care, because if he waited too long he would lose control of himself and go after anything even people. He needed an animals blood and fast.4
"Chris! Chris!!! Where are you?! Did I do something? I'm sorry! Where are you? Chris!" Dara yelled. Then she spotted him facing away from her. She ran over to him and put her hand on his shoulder. "Chris?"5
He turned around. With tears running down his cheeks he looked down into her icy blue eyes. "Go home."6
She wiped away his tears and softly kissed his lips.7
Chris cried harder now. *No.. Dara.. Get away! Why can't I speak?! No! Not you! Anyone but you! Anyone!* Chris pulled her close and kissed her lips. Then kissed her face down to her neck. Chris opened his mouth wide. He had two extremely sharp teeth on top, then he bit in deep. Blood dripped from her neck.8
"AAHHHHHH!!!" She pushed him away and he fell to the ground. "CHRIS!!"9
Chris was crying harder than ever now. Blood all around his mouth and dripping down. "Dara! I'm sorry! Dara.. I.. I'm a vampire." He opened his mouth showing her his teeth.10
Dara dropped to her knees.. "Chris.. No.." Crying now.11
"Dara, I love you.. and I'm willing to do anything for you to be safe.. I'm leaving and I'm not coming back.. Dara?"12
"yea?"13
"I'm in love with you and.. I'm sorry."14
"I love you too." Dara went over to him and kissed his blood stained lips. They both stood now holding eachothers hands. "Don't go.. Please.."15
"I love you and I want you safe. Away from me."16
Dara walked over to the brick wall and facing it and she began to cry.17
Dara had dropped her purse when Chris had bit her. Chris picked up her purse and gave it to her. "Go home now Dara. I love you."18
Dara put her hand on Chris's cheek. "Please don't."19
"I have to. You don't know what you mean to me. You mean the world to me and if keeping you safe means I have to leave then I must. I love you."20
Dara started kissing Chris and pushed him against the cold brick theater wall. She waited untill he was lost in the kiss and pulled a stake out of her purse and stabed him right in the heart. "I've been waiting for this moment."21
Chris felt his life draining and the coldness overcoming his body.. He didn't know if it were because he was stabbed in the heart or that he was stabbed in the back by his best friend and the love of his life. In a weak voice Chris said his last words "Dara I.. I love yo-"22
Dara gave a wicked smile. "I never loved you. You damn bloodsucker!"23
Chris's life flashed. He saw images of Dara and him because thats all his life was. Now it was all gone.. and even worse, it never really was.24
A contest entry
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Dedicated to my imaginary friend Franky ;]
Comments
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Interesting little twist. I wasn't expecting that at all. But I would've liked more emotional impact. Write in times they spent together or something. Bring back happy memories. It will give a more devastating emotional impact if you emphasize first on the good points in their relationship.
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Hey thanks a lot for that tip, I'll see about making it more emotional.
Peace luv empathy
Tiff
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Well written, but sad as... i feel numb...
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wow. i didn't expect that! it was so well written, i loved it!!


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WOW
That's an interesting plot. I'm not usually into fantasy, but this story was good netherless. I liked the irony in the surprise ending, I definitely didn't expect that. You'd make a great suspense writer! Great job!
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I didn't expect that, lol, took me by complete suprise. Awesome ending, though...it was cold of her, really was, but that's the whole point. Anyway, good job.
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very good story though
ouch...in every sense of the word
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