Dearest love,1
I apologise for the hurt I've caused you over the past few days. I did not mean any harm. I had other worries to contend with, but that, I fear, is no excuse.2
All of today I sat on my own, wondering if you were indeed talking to me, or if I had lost you forever. You may think that I am being a fool, but a man's pride is a fragile thing.3
I'm sorry, please forgive me. I'm a wreck without your smile. Look, I'm shaking so much, I cannot write.4
I've wanted to tell you something for a few days. It is how I feel about you.5
You are the fairest maiden I have ever laid eyes upon. Your hair, pure as the glistening moonlight. Your eyes, sparkling blue like the still waters. Your skin, eyes, lips, all as beautiful now as they will be in years to come. I feel you are as beautiful on the inside as you are on the outside.6
Darling, what I want to say is that I love you. I love you. Please forgive me?7
I wait on your reply.8
My deepest affections,9
Kain10
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I love the archaic language in this. I can see it being written from a medieval knight to his "fair maiden". There was a lot of cliched language, but I think it's supposed to be like that.
I like the line, "I'm a wreck without your smile." I really don't know why. It just stuck out.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck!
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This is a sad and heartfelt write. As they say, sorry always seems to be the hardest word to say. I wish you luck in the contest
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very good idea.... it is another way of seeing a poem .. good thought... format..thanks u thought me something.. even i should write something ... not a good phase ... Bella- Malta
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RYN: Blah to you. I will not add SQUEE because it is said too much by someone else. BLAH. Did I not say BLAH TO YOU????? Ach. I'll shut up now. Not being in the greatest of moods. Kinda need you bud. Come see me? IM me or somethin? By the way, sad letter. I remember that one.
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This was a beautiful write. The line that touched me the most wasn't "I love you". I expected that to be in there somewhere. The line that was really touching was where you spoke of shaking without seeing her smile. That was so sweet. Beautiful story...
-morgana
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