[ I dreamed I was a bullet, ]

I dreamed I was a bullet,

in the darkness of your mind,

screaming, bleeding, tearing, sighing,

deadly.

I dreamed I was the catalyst,

in the revolution of my heart,

changing, revolting,

free.

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  • Prodigious.Mirth
    September 19, 2007
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    Loved it so simple so different {I dreamed} wonderfull


  • Veritaserum
    July 28, 2007

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    Now that's thinking out of the box!

    I liked it...very interesting take, and cool wording. Well done!


  • Asfand
    July 23, 2007
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    Ver unique! the poem is nicely penned, and sort of dark. i loved it. thnx.


  • IxIDarkMelodiesIxI
    July 22, 2007

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    o.O

    So poetic. You could definately feel this poem....well, I can anyways...Now that I know you rock, I shall be adding you as a friend, if you accept. ^_^.