Her breasts,
with fluid sustenance flowed from rosy peak to waiting mouth.
Then, nothing.
No more milk.
Goodbye, Baby.
Goodbye.
Author notes
Breast feeding a baby is neither disgusting, nor erotic.
As I learned in class, when famine strikes, mother's milk is first to go. Starvation is a horrible thing, especially when it causes a woman's body to betray her and shut down the one source of life that her baby depends on. ...Ugh. I'm thinking too much about this. Now I'm depressed. This shit actually is happening right now, in Darfur, amongst other places. *depression*
Contest: Milk
In a list
A contest entry
- 20 Crafted Beauties by Asfand.
200 points, ended August 3, 2007, 16 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
See??? What I tell you?! lol
I just KNEW your entry would get the gold!!! It HAD TO! It was definitely the best, with the emotional factor to back up the words.
Great job again, and Congrats on the gold!
-
i jsut read this again and i was soo deeply touched....phew...this is like....beautiful.....exotically emotionally beautiful
-
Kind of macabre, when you think about it.
-
This is sooooooo..... *bam!* AWESOME GOOD! cuz it's got so much meaning in so little words! This is like really sad to say goodbye baby... now about author notes: thanks for the info about it. Yeah, it's really sad to see the body of a woman betray her and her child... it's really sad.
Good Job! -
Wow!
This is an amazing take on the simple prompt!!! You've managed to turn "milk" into a very thought provoking, emotional, and important message here!! Brilliant job in just 20 words!
And the fact that it's emotionally effective in such a profound way, makes one think about the tremendous plight in the world... Your words were expertly chosen and convey your thoughts in a simple, yet poetic way. AWESOME! I loved it. I'm thinking you already won this contest!
-
Wow. Until I read your author's note, I was totally confused. But now it's like "woah." Good luck. Awesome poem. Very powerful.
x Julez -
This is very very touching! Very! That is exactly what i call thinking out of the box, and you did this with great imagery and wow! just amazing! I loved this, srsly. It was very thought-provoking as a take on the prompt and you wowed me. Brilliant!
Ingenius is more like it.
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
