“Oh dear, dear, dear, I shall be late meeting Maurice. I should of been there half of an hour ago.” I hurried off through the waning crowd of people on the streets. I did not watch where I was going and therefore ran into a young girl carrying a basket of breads. “So sorry Mademoiselle my apologies.” I bent down to give her a hand. “Oui Oui it is quite all right .” We finished and I bid her farewell. If I hurried I would be in Maurice's parlor within ten minutes. The walk was brisk and invigorating, before I knew it I was being led into the parlor by his butler. It was empty. Two teacups sat in their saucers still steaming. I let my eyes wander around the room. I quickly noticed things that would almost drive me to the brink of insanity. My wife's lace gloves were strewed about, one lay on the mantle the other on the coffee table. Her silk shawl thrown haphazardly over the back of the sofa. Worst of all however was the heart shaped locket I had gotten for her last Christmas. I found it used as a tea stirrer the little golden chain still gently waving around the rim of the cup. I lifted the brown stained locket out of the cup. It dripped onto his Persian carpet. I didn’t care. I opened the locket, both of our pictures, ruined by the tea. I clenched my fist around it and threw the cursed item into the hearths flames. I promptly took my leave. “My day will come...I will get my revenge my dear Maurice.”1
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Terrifying awesome. I mean .... WOW. I'll be looking up for more of your stories.
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I haven't the time to really comment now, but I hate wasting people's points. Just a quick tip: Should of is actually grammatically incorrect it’s should have, I believe, which is usually shortened to should’ve. Sorry, will check back later.
Grazia
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ooo.......this is fabulous. i love it.
it hooks a person in, and keeps them wanting more
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Wow. This makes the reader stop and wonder what is going on and then go back and read it again. At least it did me. Watch how you use "should of." It should be "should've." This is great. I want to read more.
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love it
i have to agree with aunt rebeka, heh. this was awesome. come on please, you gotta make the second part to this. i beg you. this is so cool. you could make such a great story. i mean its a great story already, and you left me striving for more. but dont tease, heh. great job. -
brillant
i cant wait to read more of this ...love the colorful image and accents...took me all the way to france! using the locket as a tea stirrer...how cruel of her...what a great line in this story.
hope you are having a great weekend too!
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