Frosting

I opened up my lunch
To see this little sandwich
Red and pink frosting
In the shape of broken hearts

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  • hey incendiary
    August 2, 2007
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    Very nostalgic, and quite lovely. Oh, and "Sandwich*"

  • Elegant Inspirer
    August 1, 2007

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    I read up on this contest and i think that it is way cool. I could never do it but i think your gonna do really well in this contest! i think your idea would be considered thinking outside the box.
    Elli


  • Delfishie
    July 21, 2007

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    This is awesome. Of all the poems in this contest, yours is totally my favorite so far. It's just really nicely done.


  • Asfand
    July 21, 2007

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    Nice, good creativity. Red and pink frosting sounds so cute. Nice!! thanks fore ntering and good luck!


  • Kari gold member
    July 20, 2007

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    Aww, well this is very imagery. I think that you've done really well and I wish you the best of luck in the contest.

    - BrokenWingsFly -


  • Siby Anan
    July 20, 2007
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    Beautiful!

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