Falling down into myself
I can only feel the grief you brought
I loved you for what you were
Yet now my soul will never be caught1
Have you ever seen a child die
Within all grace and beauty they fall
Innocence is all behind their smile
But when defiled they loose it all2
Dying in my arms
The blood running through my hands
My child crying upon my shoulder
From the pain brought from contraband3
Evil lurking from her stare
She brought the life to him
And took it away in despair
With the blood being the toll of sin4
My child called her name in wonder
As he never expected she could do this to her
And within my mind i heard the thunder
Of hatred lurking that started to stir5
Tears falling from my eyes
As i held my dead child
Ger evil stare still lurking
And my feelings defiled6
Feeling hollow inside
I care no more
The one thing i loved
Taken forever more7
Holding the gun
Towards her in pain
My child limp
And my life in vain8
She took away my life
What i wanted for so long
And loved with out a strife
For he made me feel strong9
Turning the gun on her i aimed where it would hurt
Shooting her in the side
The pain she gave reverted
And i hoped she would die10
For i have nothing left to live for
I turn the gun on myself
Stroking my childs hair one last time
And remembering what i had felt11
The bullet taking away my pain
The last thing i had thought
Was of you my beautiful child
And for you i had fought12
My life now lost
Into the blackened water of my own hell
My child is the light at the top of the shaft
Holding me for this story to tell13
Author notes
just wanting to write something that relates to the loss of a child, because i fear this alot, and i hate hearing of children dying, also i know a few people who have lost a child and i wanted to try and write about it, its also something that alot of people don't wnat to think about
A contest entry
- To Implant My Scars On Your Heart by Iridescent Love.
350 points, ended February 23, 2008, 3 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 7 of 7
-
jeeze it made me cry
-
I think all good parents fear losing their child and fear circumstances they can't control and bad people...I don't think the fear goes away even when children grow up either...
-
oh i love this so much... it has all of the components to make a longer poem interesting throughout and hold complete meaning.
the repeated line- evil lurking from her stare- is truely my favorite. it is so powerful and imaginative.
also there is sort of a horrible twist at the end that you cant truely blame for it is only human. it may be sad but i think it was more real written as it is.
-
so very sad yet written so well!
i know people who have lost children, and it is indeed really sad. well done on this piece <3 -
-
thankyou <3
-
-
This is really a sad poem, but you warned us in your profile! The loss of a child is a horrible thing, because children are so innocent, honest, and happy, that to lose such a beautiful personalty is horrible. Very well written here!
-
Powerful poem. The loss of a child is terrible. Loved the line "My child is the light at the top of the shaft" that what my mother used to tell me
.
keep up the great work
Emma
Adding your comment:
1 - 7 of 7
