If I was a second

If I was a second
I'd be one on the best moment of your life
Lasting longer than all the ones before me
Just one second
Always being remembered by you

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Hi! I love your contest! Good luck with it, because you seem to have a lot of entries! ;)

Love Lily

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  • InMemoryofCharlieJr
    August 12, 2007
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    I really like this! I can't wait to read more of your work.


  • Yi Yin
    August 3, 2007

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    aaaaaaaw, this poem is like a line. It's just to nice and sweet, and it's like a lover's sweet words for his/her other half. This is so good! Good Job!


  • The Imagined
    August 1, 2007
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    I like how the second is described as one that lasts "longer than all the ones before". Literally, a second is just a second, but what happens within it really can make it seem to stretch into forever. And we always remember the good ones. Good luck in the contest.


  • Asfand
    July 20, 2007
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    Thanks alot Lily!! And this was very fantastic! Nice penning!