If I Was A Star

If I was a star,
I'd be so full of magnetic brightness.
Shining, and subliming, for all to view.
The brightest in the sky, for miles and miles.
Every wish wished upon me, comes true within a blink of an eye.

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  • caitecola
    July 22, 2007

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    This is nice. You could expand, but the idea is good, and what you have so far is intriguing. I think you could expand on the feeling and the emotion of being a star, though. If you did, I know I'm not the only one who would read it.


  • Asfand
    July 20, 2007
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    Great imagery in this piece. Loved the penning and creativity. Keep it up! Thanks for entering!