If I were a page in a book
I'd be the wavy description
of a swiflty flowing brook
on a steel gray day
in a land far, far away
In a list
A contest entry
- Five Lines Only by Asfand.
200 points, ended August 4, 2007, 28 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow that was really
good
it was short but amazing
:3
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Wow, this is really reallly good!
I like the description of you being a page in a book.
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This is a really good poem. The choice of words helps to stash a lot of imagery into each line, like with the phrases "wavy description" or "steel gray day". And the reference of a far-away land at the end makes me wish there were more.
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Thank you so much. I don't usually write poems but this contest intrigued me. Thanks for the luck and for commenting.
Brooke
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I love this
I like the way you used very few words, and yet still managed to create great imagery! I can see the image you described...very nicely done!
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Thank you for taking the time to read this. I don't usually write poems. I don't think I do a very good job, but a writer has got to challenge themselves in order to grow.
Thanks again.
~*Brooke*~
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This is really good
I liked it. Gives a lot of cool imagery in just a few words. I especially liked the way you used "wavy description" to describe the flowing brook! Very cool. Nice job! -
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Thanks. As I've stated before I don't usually write poems. I really don't think I know how. But I'm trying to learn more. Again thanks
~*Brooke*~
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wow! wow! really, this is amazing! i knew people who used this would be really creative, and here is my answer! Brilliant job, this is so imaginative and wonderfully penned! Great job!
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Thank you, thank you, thank you
I don't usually write poems (not very good at it) but thanks.
~*Brooke*~
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