It’s always hard to fit in,
When the place you are is new.
Some people are accepting,
But these people can be few.
It’s always hard to fit in, so
Offer a smile to those who are new.
It took time for you to know what you know
Remember you were them once too.
When I happened upon a place,
With stories aplenty to share.
It took a time to find my space,
But friendship I found there.
This is for those who offered a hand,
To me when I was but a newbie.
To you the electric man,
And to you oh beautiful lady.
Author notes
This was just a small piece I threw together because I though it would be fitting to put some thoughts into words. Poetry is most definitely not my strong point so I know it's woeful.
As for the whole point of the piece, it's obviously about how it is easier for someone to enter into a group/community when someone offers their friendship. The last two stanzas are about me joining this wonderful site. The people mentioned in the last lines are the first two people to befriend me - Electric Sunrise (the electric man) and TaylorTheBeautiful (oh beautiful lady)
And since that probably doesn't count for the rules - I love you Taylor! (I don't know how to do the handy thingy)
A contest entry
- Poems Please ENTER ALL! by Taylor Renee.
450 points, ended July 30, 2007, 19 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wonderful read and such a great moral
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Great poem!
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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Very sweet! I can relate to it too! I love how the everything flowed and connected!
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Awwwwww!!!
This is definately one of my favorites. Most definately. And not only cuz I'm mentioned
Kay. The poem was definately written really, really well. You rhymed naturally and it wasn't at all stressed, which is great. I always seem to have to work on getting my rhyming to flow nicely. You did it perfectly
So away from the boring part, structure Onto the fun- the message!
This was a terrific message to anyone, and it's great because I always want people to be able to relate to the poems I write, and everyone can relate to this once and a while. So tthat was perfect.
Also, you followed all of my rules And I was mentioned!! Definately a plus- as if you needed it!!!
Anyway, my point s that I really loved this entry. Great job, good luck and thanks soooo much for entering my contest!
xoxo
Tay
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Thank you for your kind comment. I just don't feel that it's write but you've inspired me to put more effort into writing poetry. (I've gone years without writing one and now have written four in a week.)
Oh! And I found them
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