I dreamed I was the night air,
In the dark sky,
Flowing,
Peacefully
I dreamed I was an owl,
Above the forest,
Gliding,
Silently
A contest entry
- Windsparks by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 28, 2007, 17 entries
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yay! now it's good....nice thing with the owl!!!
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Thank you!
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if you have read the rules, you will notice you must have two stanzas, both related to each other. I would like for you to edit this, add another stanza and IM me, please.
about this part, i think it's brilliant! really, the night air, excellent. dark skay does not have to start with capitals even to show uniqueness it's wrong....
sitting?? this doesn't fit....use swaying, blowing, ya noe....
over all, i loved this! great job!! -
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I fixed it! Hope you like it!
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