I dreamt I was a flower,
In the middle of a valley,
Blossoming, flowering,
Beautifully
♥
I dreamt I was the waves,
In the middle of the sea,
Dancing, racing,
Splendidly
♥
I dreamt I was the moon,
High up in the dark night,
Lightening, illuminating,
Magically
♥
I dreamt I was the wind,
Everywhere in the world,
Churning, blowing
Endlessly
♥
I dreamt I was a baby,
In a big, warm blanket,
Crying, needing,
Naturally
♥
I dreamt I was a mother,
In the hearts of all my children,
Helping, protecting,
Lovingly
Author notes
My mom's birthday is this Tuesday, July 24. I am giving her this for her birthday, hence why it ended with the mother part.
I think mother's are a hugely important part of every child's life, so that's why I wrote the ending about them
Like it?
NOT A POET! ...yet
PS:
This was made beautiful with the help of my sexy friend, Kurai Yume!!!
For the contest 1 vs. 100:
I think that this is my best poem. It means A LOT. My favorite poem of mine, too. Absolutely no doubt. It started with a poem I wrote for a contest, a different poem I had, ended with this one. I have a huge explaination about it. Basically (and I mean basically) each stanza stands for a virtue I think is important in life. The flower stanza is beauty. Waves is fun. Moon is hope. Wind is perseverence. Baby is innocence and mother is love. EVery word in this poem is there for a reason. The idea of dreaming is because in life you can't get these virtues without something bad. So in the poem there isnb't any bad, right? That's because it's a dream. Get it? You get beauty without jealousy and bitterness, fun without it having to end, hope without a need for hoping, perseverence without a reason to persevere to get through, innocence without the ending of innocence and love without hate or broken hearts or people dying or whatever else you can think of to end love. Get the idea? It's the perfect dream. In a poemy thing. And trust me, I could've said A LOT more about this. Hah. I have to do this in size ten font on MS Word to print it on one page! *giggle thing but there's no smileys here!*
So I hope YOu liked it!
For LostSoulOfRage's contest:
Hm....I love all Disney movies. I don't know what my favorites are!! That's a hrad question!!!
A contest entry
- Windsparks by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 28, 2007, 17 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - 1 Vs 100 by asthray.heart.
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• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Blue Chickes with Red Spiked Hair by LostSoulOfRage.
350 points, ended October 13, 2007, 20 entries
Honorable mention
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thnx for entering the contest. srry for the late commenting.
okay wow this is really good. i love it. i agree i think momthers are a huge part in a child's life. this was a truley amazing, beautiful peice. great job and keep up the good work.
-LostSoul
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This is good Taylor. Actually beautiful,
Hope you were a winner in this contest.
Well I'll check if you were myself.Good work!!!
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Wow this was amazing, the reason you want to win is almost as good as the poem.
A poet in the making I assume, and a good one from this poem which is beautifully intricate about the one thing that makes this world exists and that is mothers.
Tnks for entering and goodluck,
~Lady Madeline.
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again I really love this poem. I really think you have talent. you are a very very talented writer. I'm so glad I read it again. THis is like one of your best pieces of work. you are a great writer. You are awesome! I love your writing. you have excellent writing talent. THis is the best thing in the entire world. I love how well written it is. By the way. tay tay, you seem different did you change your hair? lol. I cant even see your hair. Just a little inside joke. I suck at comments. lol.
P.S
You are awesome. love ya! you are a great friend.
Evalyn.
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Beautiful
thats all i have to say about this -
i saw that on your myspace
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My mom was right. This was great. I think I'll get her to read this after I'm done.
Phoenixflower
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I do love it
It is awesome. I think it's as good as proffessional poetry you rock. I know good poetry because I had two poems published. I don't mean to brag. sorry if it soundslike i'm bragging sorry -
Nice piece, each stanza relates to the next and stands on its own. That can be tough to do. Good read.
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aaaaaaaaaaaw this is sooooo good! Tay this is really good! How dare you still say not a poet! You are sooo a poet now!
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YOU IDIOT! WOULD STOP SAYING YOU'RE NOT A BLOODY POET!!!!!!! Sorry, but I thought that a little shake was in order. You write poetry beautifully, and I am just fed up with you saying you ain't a poet. FOR THE LOVE OF GOD, THIS IS FREAKIN' BEAUTIFUL! Ahem, now that's outta my system. I hope I got to you, or so help me God, if I see you writing you're not a poet in any of your future author's notes, I will strangle you through this computer! This was a really well written poem, and I absolutely loved it. You conveyed lovely images into my mind, and I LOVED the last part about the mothers. Mothers are definitely important and one of the most significant people in our lives. WELL DONE! I would applaud this, and your other works, but I still have minus points, so I'm broke!
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that was veryyy good. the words choice was almost perfect. i didnt like how u said flower twice in the 1st stanza. maybe im just being picky but it just didnt go well wit me. anyways still very good. gl in the contest.
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For someone who keeps saying that she can't write poety you haven't put a foot wrong yet Taylor. This is a beautiful piece and flows really well.
I love how each stanza had the same style, ending with just the single adverb. Great write. -
Nice job
This is really good! Very nice images and feelings in it. Perfect for giving to your mom.
But I feel i have to point out that all the stanzas are supposed to relate to eachother, within the same subject I belive. So, while all the reast are things about NATURE, the last two don't really fit in with that theme as they are about humans. Get me? lol. Sorry but i kinda like to follow the rules and in contests i feel everyone should try to do the same.
but i really do like it! it's beautiful as it is, for a regular poem. Just the last 2 parts don't fit with the rest if it's a windspark poem is all.
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LOVELY!!
Wow Taylor...this is really beautiful. Tell me again why you think you can't write poems???????? haha....cuz girl...you sure can! You did a great job on this. I like it even better than the first one!
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wowww wonderfulll this is so poetic and so welll writteen good lucks in da contest
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This is really pretty. I like it a lot.
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Oh, I have a suggestion! You know how you put spaces in between stanzas? How about you put little hearts in there?
Like this;
I dreamed I was a flower,
In the middle of a valley,
Blossoming, flowering,
Beautifully
♥
I dreamed I was the waves,
In the middle of the sea,
Dancing, racing,
Splendidly
Doesn't that look prettyful? Makes it nice and pretty for dear mommy -
BEAUTIFUL!! *is crying*
You can enter more than once in this contest?
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