"I'll push you on the swing!
And then you can push me!"
At the age of nine,
Wasn't everything fine?
I'll be your backbone, and support you
As long as you support me too.
As we drift apart,
We always find each other.
As we sacrifice the world,
We'll always be together.
Hold my hand, and stick with me
"Together," I say, "Together we'll be."
At the age of sixteen,
All that was hidden could finally be seen.
You ditched me for the other girl
You used to be my precious pearl.
Neither did you stick with me,
Neither could you ever see.
What happened to the laughter?
Why are there only tears?
It'll never be 'happily ever after,'
Now there are only fears.
All these years, you were my friend
This broken friendship may never mend.
At last I cannot live without you
It's something that I just can't do.
I feel someone embrace me from behind,
And then let go as I turn around.
It's my old friend, I turn around to find.
"I'm sorry," she said, such a beautiful sound.
I was just a kid, she was just a kid,
Whatever had happened, was something we did.
At long last, our friendship has returned,
"True friendship lasts forever." So we have learned.
Author notes
The rhyme scheme is complicated. If you REALLY want to find out what it is, message me
This poem goes for the option "Friendship." I'm sure you've already figured that out
I wrote this poem because as we all probably know, every friendship has its ups and downs. I just wanted to show that, in a way. And like every poem of mine, it starts out happy-ish and then it gets all sad-ish and then it leaves an impression on you by resolving the conflict. [Or maybe that's just how I think of them ] I guess, this is perhaps one of the better poems I wrote. I hope it really leaves an impression on you and makes you want to come back to see if I wrote any more awesome poems
Taylor Renee is my sexy friend. She's also my ballet buddy We're both sexy ballerinas
A contest entry
- Poems Please ENTER ALL! by Taylor Renee.
450 points, ended July 30, 2007, 19 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think?
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So much better! You and I are competing for the same contest. lol. Maybe you'd take a look at my contest? I just created one. Good Luck!
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I shall go check it out! Thank you for commenting
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Ahhhh!!!
My sexy bestie ballet buddy!!!!!
NOW you're definately a finalist
This was a great poem, and you wrote it really well
You followed all the rules\, so great job on that. I love that you make friendships now seem perfect, but realistic, also keeping it so that that endings aren't tragic
Great job my sexy friend, good luck and thanks so much for entering my contest!!!
xoxo
Tay
(again!)
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lol ^^ Glad you liked it XD
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Wow.
This was a beautiful poem. You did great. It sorta reminded me of my best friends poem, but in mine they stayed friends
This was written really nicely though, the rhyming was really creative and good. It had a pretty nice flow to it, also
But um...*cough* are you a ballerina? *cough* Read the contest or pay....by not winning...*cough*
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OH MY GOD!!I was in such a hurry I forgot to write about that!! SOOOO SORRY!!! *Bows twice*
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It was a nice rhyme scheme, although, my only suggestion is that in the middle... it took me a minute to realize that you had jumped from being nine to having a broken relationship. And, also, it would be beneficial if you said what the two friends did to separate themselves.
Other than that, I enjoyed it. It was well written.
C.E.
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Sure; I'll try that. Thank you for reading, and the suggestion ^-^
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you are very welcome!
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Aww that's cute
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This was really, your best so far. It makes me think of Summer.
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