Safe Within My Dreams

I dreamed I was a lover,
In the dark of the night,
Whispering,
Sweetly.

I dreamed I was your heart,
Deep within your chest,
Beating,
Rhythmically.

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  • Veritaserum
    July 17, 2007
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    Really nice!

    This is lovely!! It has such a nice feel to it...romantic, soft, sweet...

    I especially like the second stanza ALOT! "I dreamed I was your heart, deep within your chest, beating rhythmically". That's awesome. Love it.

    Good luck in the contest!


  • Taylor Renee
    July 17, 2007

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    Wow. Great job and good luck in the contest! This was really beautiful, and Asfand seemed to like it


  • Asfand
    July 17, 2007
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    YES! Excellent job! i love this. this was so related. Ppl can relate to it as well. This was just wonderful. Using windspark as a way to express the true feeling of love. Excellent job! i'm very impressed. The other stanza is just as good. Great job!!


  • Siby Anan
    July 16, 2007
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    Beautiful!! ^__^