I dreamt I was an eagle,
In the heart of my country, America
Flying,
Gracefully.
♥
I dreamt I was an albatross
In the light of the dying sun
Soaring,
Endlessly.
Author notes
I think this contest is fantastic! ^_^
Seriously, with the guidelines and everything; wonderful
~Ziby♥
A contest entry
- Windsparks by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 28, 2007, 17 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think? ^^
Comments
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yay!! i read it...i'm not overly fond of eagles, they fly above our school grounds and snatch samosas (pkistani eating thingy) from your hands! talk about nerve! but the fact is that they are very fearless, extraordinarily great hunters.....
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I know what samosas are
I've eaten quite a few of them myself 
I tried to think of a bird that would fly with honor
They steal samosas? Oh my gosh! That's crazy! They actually steal them from your hands? *laughs* They're almost extinct in America
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wow! this is wonderfully penned. Birds. i love birds. i love the feeling of freedom you get in reading these.
in the frist stanza, perhaps you could be a bit more precise. Which bird...even though it is not wrong , you specified the brid in the second one so it would only fit to out it in the first one.
In the light of the dying sun...
i am really impressed with this line, it has such a good tone, and flow....i loved this. This was pretty darn amazing!! -
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Why, thank you very much ^^ I will find another bird that amazes me, other than the albatross, and I shall put it in there.
Glad you liked it!♥
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I dreamt I was an albatross
In the light of the dying sun
Soaring,
Endlessly.
Thats, my fave line. ^^ good luck Siby.
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Flying, an awesome experience ^^ Love it.
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Thank you!
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Wow.
This was way better than mine!!! You're an awesome poet.
It's an honor to have you call mine good. Really!!
Great job, and I hope you win the contest!
xoxo
Tay
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I hope YOU win! You entered too! You're my rival!
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