I dreamed I was the waves,
In the middle of the sea,
Dancing, racing
Splendidly
I dreamed I was the waves,
Onto the rocks and shore,
Thrashing, crashing
Aggressively
Author notes
Yeah. I really hope I don't get in trouble for two words on the thrid part!!! WHatcha think?
Note again:
Not a poet here!!!
A contest entry
- Windsparks by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 28, 2007, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this!
Hey Tay...
This is really wonderful! I saw this before I even knew what type of contest it was, (but didn't have time to comment then)...and thought to myself..."wow! This is really great!" So whaddya mean your not a poet?? HMMMM??? This IS poetry you've written dear! And very good at that.
I love it. Good luck in the contest.
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No you don't get in trouble, it is still a verb...as in both are. Well, knwingly or unknowingly, you put relation to the sea. One fo the most powerful and representative objects in the world. The sea is an insignia of calmness, of tanquility, sadness, purity, cruelty and above all power. This gives u a great advantage. I think this was wonderful...plus the flattery for the contest really puts me in a great mood.
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Beautiful and very heart-felt. It was wonderful, Taylor
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Splendedly=Splendidly
Agressively=Aggressively
This was quite the amazing poem! I think you're lying when you say you're not a poet You're a natural!!
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Very nicely done! This was really beautiful and you really are a very talented poet! This, beautiful, very! You see, I can barely speak! Just one thing, "splendedly," is actually "splendidly."
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