Weirdish

"He's all weirdish" I said. And mummy said

"That would be weird, darling. And he just needs some rest." But I looked at daddy - who's eyes was red and skin was scratchy, and very weirdish - but I looked at daddy, and he wasn't going to rest any. Daddy wouldn't play with me, or watch telly, or walk Pogo to the park, he just sniffed. And moaned. And scratched. And mummy said he did something called a "howl".

And then, yesterday's yesterday, daddy wasn't there anymore. On his pillows on the couch was something snarly and bitey. And he smelled like rotting. And he did something mummy screamed was "lurching", and then biting, and then mummy was doing a "howl", and now she's weirdish too. I'm not sure she sees me now. Even when I watch telly for 3 hours, even though there are no shows left.

So when mummy got weirdish, I ran away. But all the people and animals - and Pogo - are weirdish now. And I wonder when I'll get to be weirdish, too.

Author notes

Here's the setup: I'm currently at a summer camp with a lot of variety, including a rather useless creative writing course. The other day, the eight of us gave titles to the person sitting to the right of us. I was given a title by a girl who I will call "Haley".

Haley is ten, amongst the rest of us who are all fourteen or over. She's cute and all, but she's generally been a royal pain in the ass: Her presence has forced the counselor in charge to forbid the use of "profanity" in our writing, which includes many adult concepts.

"Weirdish" was the title I was given, and I decided to be as disturbing as possible without using "curse words".

I simply asked myself: "How would a four year old English child respond to an apocalyptic zombie invasion?"

There's an explanation in the author's notes.

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  • the wonder girl silver member
    July 23, 2007

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    *makes Haley "weirdish," lmao*

    OMG.. I SOOOOOOO got this story concept!!! *feels all smartish now* I had an image of zombies happening and all, and for a while, I wondered if my unhealthy fear of zombies just manifested itself in my mind as I read

    Hahahaha! I can understand how you feel.. my sister is 24, but sometimes, I feel like she's 4... though, yes, she always feels the need to stress that she's older than I am. Though, I THINK her purpose in your summer camp is to make you grow as a writer I mean, come on, I can imagine you having fun writing this (and it IS a challenge, writing adult stuff and having so much "rules" to avoid or something).

    Hmm.. now.. I've read a number of your pieces and noticed your lack of grammar/technical errors so.. I don't know if this WAS intentional or not (I'm thinking it is, but oh well, I'll point it out anyway )
    who's eyes is -> "whose eyes are"

    ^_^ I told you before that (not sure if you remember) that when you write, I KNOW a person's gender before you actually reveal if s/he is indeed a s/he... and oh! Now, I think you CAN reveal ages too short yet still delightful, my son! *claps*
    I HAVE to applaude.


  • Delfishie
    July 16, 2007
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    heh

    That's great. I really enjoyed this, although I'm wondering if you did the repetition in the first paragraph on purpose or just as a fluke?

    I totally sympathize with the no curse words/adult situations thing. I hate that. What's the point of taking a 'creative' writing course if you're limited in what you can write?

    Hmpth.

    Neat story, though.