Darkened

Darkened
Light
Broken
Night

Hatred devours that which is me
I seek to kill, murderous to be
Let my hands tighten the rope
Around your neck, no more hope

Into the vines of death
Memories greater than remorse
A life no longer yours
But nothing to be forced

Take away the pain
Let the vines devour and bleed
Angels fall upon thee
And slaughter the ones of greed

Broken nightmares
Into the darkness
Hating life
Devouring the blessed

Into myself, feel the sinking,
Take out the heart
Nothing left, to mutilate
No more wanting to start

In darkness
We hide
In the light
We lie

We all lie upon ourselves
Hated by the one that created our souls
Taken away from the water and the sand
Fill our hearts with contraband

Break the stone
That covers our hearts
Let all the hatred
Be unstated

Author notes

i can't remember when i wrote this but i assume i wasn't happy lol

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  • Midnightmare
    August 11, 2007
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    yeah i am commenting again because i feel like it, haha.
    ily <3


  • Midnightmare
    July 18, 2007
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    this is one i havent read before... but i liked it =D it was really well written. good work <3

  • virusoutbreak
    July 17, 2007

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    Bravo

    The messege that you were portraying was clear, i love the description as descriptive writing is my fravorite. Good work.


  • asthray.heart
    July 16, 2007

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    I pretty much loved every part of this
    Into myself, feel the sinking,
    Take out the heart
    Nothing left, to mutilate
    No more wanting to start
    Prob my fave part

    Hope you doing good now, and in a much happier mood

    Ebb.


  • LadyLionnir
    July 15, 2007

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    Lol, wow, I loved this one too. It seemed to be about many things in particular...about light and night? Very good, never heard it quite like this but altogether is was another MASTERPIECE. My favorite part was,
    "In darkness
    We hide
    In the light
    We lie"
    Because, strangely I saw truth in the stanza. I mean we all do fear the dark but also betray eachother in the light. That's just my view of this piece. Good job!

    • nightmare-lestat
      July 16, 2007
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      thanks, i am planning to put my personal favourite up soon but i don't know if i should, because it is really long lol

      thanks for the comment

      all the best


  • LostShadow silver member
    July 15, 2007

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    Very nicely written, it had a good over all flow and I really liked this part "In darkness We hide In the light We lie". The authors note made me laugh at the "assume" part but I hope your okay now

    Keep up the great work

    Emma

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