Do You Care

a mirror
reflects the world
everything
doens't mean a thing
for the feelings have wept
and nothing is kept

jaded
is the reflection
no feelings in there
your soul is stripped bare
just like the happy formation

just stare
into what you see
the world that is blank
no love or hate
just bliss in the eyes of thee

do you care for
this world thats lost
i only care
for you
its my cost
for love

do you care
for me in this world
my soul is bare
but still do you care
i fall beyond where my heart lays
for this world was not for me
your hearts not to be
for me but as long as your there
i will carry on
taking me away
into the dusk thats in my head
having you there
makes it sunlight instead

why do i continue
this world is not for me
blank and unloving
its forsaken to see

now i look in the mirror again
seeing grey apart from you
aurora of light surrounding me
its shining off your truth

making me see brighter things
than the world thats broken away
just knowing that you love me
makes me want to stay

this world is blank
thats why its lost to me
forsaken from my mind
thats all i see
hate fills the air
and kills the life we're meant to have

mirror mirror
let me see
for this life is killing me
if i could let you go
i would drown in the sea

do you care for me being here
this world is blank
the feelings gone from me
i want to be there for you
but nothing makes me want to be

my heart is not beating now
when i'm alone
in the dark and the cold
i can't see the light shining bright
but you bring it to me
the light that i see
is the reflection of beauty
as long as you keep it here with you
your heart of truth
never will grow old

the mirror
starts to shake
craking at the sides
breaking inside
the jaded world not being shown to me

the glass
falls to the floor
but behind the blank
is the light that i sank
into the depths of me

you brought
it back to me
i'd love you if i could
because you were the only one
in the world that understood

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  • DarkRainFire
    July 12, 2007

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    This is a deep emotional write. You write with such depth and color. I love this so much. Welcome to Storywrite and keep penning.


  • EmeraldDreams
    July 12, 2007

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    This was wonderful, just brilliant! I kind of reminded me of Paradise Lost lyrics, especially when you used the word 'jaded' LOL! They are one of my favourite bands so that was cool! This really did have a lyrical feel though, very smooth and nicely flowing. Alos very powerful and emotional. You are a talented writer, keep it up!


    • nightmare-lestat
      July 14, 2007
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      thankyou, i have never listened to paradise lost but i will have to look at them now


      • EmeraldDreams
        July 14, 2007
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        I think you would like them. Try to get the albums 'Draconian Times' and 'One second'. They are the best two!