Slowly, as ever, Katarin trudged through the knee high field of grass, staff at her side. Wondering, as ever if her memory of the last two years would ever return. 1
True she had her glimpses, the pond, but she had remembered that for longer than she had lost her memory. The forest was one that had come back to her. Also, about two weeks ago she had started seeing a man in her dreams that could only be from that forest. 2
It seemed like she had been walking this field for all of her seventeen years of life. She was lost, both in thought and in reality. This particular field had only been her home for about five days now. 3
Up ahead she saw some bushes, "Water," she gasped through dry cracked lips. Her skin had run dry some two days ago. She immersed her head in the cool crystal waters. 4
"WHAT--," she screamed and reeled back, taking her face out of the water. There were trees all around her. She was sure she had just seen the man from her dreams looking back at her through the water. All she saw now was her own reflection, fair skin though it had seen its share of sun the past two years. Hair of dark black since faded to its current dusty shade. The elements had definately taken their toll on her. All that she truly recognized was her eyes, as deep and pentrating as ever, like two jade bowls filled with ocean tears, she had only seen one other pair of eyes with her color. When she glanced up again she was back in the same field she had just left, now her skin was filled though she didn't remember doing that. Her hair was innexplicably dry again. 5
It was obvious magic was at play. A madicho training to become a magi would have known that. Katarin was no mere madicho, she was one of the select Magi of the Four Scrolls. Long ago had she mastered the arts of Earth, Air, Fire, and Water.6
Hers had been an early start. Her mother had been a Scroll Magi as well. The potential in Katarin had been hard to ignore. Since birth beasts had subdued themselves in her presence, and it was a rare day when Katarin was happy and the weather was bad. No one ever said that was because of her, but no one said otherwise. 7
To say she did well would be a gross understatement. There were a few times when practice of the arts had been known but the theory behind them had been lost to the ages. One of these she had been able to enlighten the teachers with. The incantation had been 'morte sancte fae tomino', which translates to 'the fairy/magic hand removes hurt', which made sense to her teachers. They just didn't know how it worked, and she explained that the intricate motions made during the incantation were to remove the pain from the subject and transfer it somewhere else. When asked how she knew this, the only response she could give was just that she did. 8
Yet, at this time she could not determine the hand guiding the arts around her. Nor could she use her hand, not for about two months now. She still had her staff but the magic had drawn back into the wood, the sacred runes were barely visible to her. The arts were not completely lost to her, but most were, like the runes on her staff her powers were fading. Some would gauge her power on par or even below par with madicho, right now at least. 9
Author notes
well with any luck this will be the begining of a book length story...maybe a novella who knows...i have another part of it already written...pretty much the middle discovery stage of the book check out the other parts of story if you want to read that...any ideas you have for this one feel free to let me know...i will keep a seperate file on my comp as credits...maybe someday we'll all be famous hehe.
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great!!!
This was great babe...on my way to read the other parts.. -
uhhh...what jumping are you talking about?
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well.. for a begining its good... i kinda like the jumping though you are going to have to explain that later... i am going to leave the rest for a little later... and hey when you gonna read mine... sorry no it was good really good.. Dragonia
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sounds like i will like yours then *walks off muttering about needing to get ready for a party and distractions*
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heh, i like it man, style sounds somewhat like mine, with the many details and wonderful adjective use! yay! finally! i am intrigued and must contine to read. onward
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really detailed..i liked it a lot so far...so on i read..mwahahaha and all that good crap
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i will not watch it!! i will let it get out of control and love it hehe
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woooo.....i like it!!! awesome! just watch that god complex JP
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and lets pretend i didn't make-up the words, and continue to pretend that tomino means pull, so morte sancte fae tomino, "death, from sanctuary, the fairy hand pulls" kinda makes sense...to me at least hehe...but really i just made the whole thing up knowing only that morte and fae were accurate hehe...besides who says latin is in my world? hehe *looks down upon the universe living in his mind, developping a god complex*
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So far, so good. The Latin phrase is bugging me though. "mort" is a stem for "death", and "sancte" is usually a stem for "sanctuary". (Sorry... I'm not an English major, but I know a little bit about Latin)Other than that, though, It's good! *Off to part II)
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i would love it if you did hehe *bows graciously before you* i thank you most humbly for your audience
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That's really good... Now I'm gonna keep reading it.
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ooooh, my fav type of story, fantasy!
wow, how cool. ive been looking for a book to read recently. now i can just come on here and read your stories!
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If you intend to write a book you really need to do some plotting. You have some good ideas but many of the sentences are rather muddled and miss-paced, a fairly clear sign of a writer trying to ‘wing’ it. I think you write well enough but need to lay the ground work… especially if you are planning a novel – there are a lot of good writers out there and if you wish to be published you must aim very high. If you are just writing for fun – please ignore this comment…
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Oooh I want to read more but I can't write now, I have to go. I'll try to later on...
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I like it, too... it's a lot like all of the other books that I read.
Well, I suppose by now you probably have a few more chapters up. I shall have to go look for them... right after I post the next chapter in my book. I completly forgot to do that until I read this...
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I had thought that I had left a comment the first time i read this...and i did..it just didn't show up! lol
Obviously, i like it alot...you've got a good thing goin on here..
and odd that it's familiar to me..much like a dream i have had for years & years...
you have talent...and i hope you let me know when it comes out as a book
Peace
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Wow, I could really see this all happening in the first part, and it really helped with the explaining thing in the second half. This sounds really professional, nicely written.
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Hee, I like this one, very much enjoyed. The man from her dreams. . a fantasy and mystery. Very intriguing.
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7.2/10
Fantasy-Fairytale piece? Or somewhat like that....I don't know. It gave a few good images like her lips that you described.
A good start to I am sure a good story.
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I'm off to read Part two
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part one sounds very interesting but for a few questions I have. How old is Katarin? If she has no memory, how can she know her background as a magi? Otherwise, looking foreward to part 2
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