The shackles rang
They stung like a fang
They cut and bruised
I’m fucking misused
I’m fucking misused
I’m fucking misused
Look at each other, look at each other
Know, know, know
Look at each other, Go away
…stung like a fang
Know, know, and know
You can’t know
You can never know…
But I’m going to
I’m going to, I’m going to
…Fucking misused
We’re all fucking misused aren’t we
We are
…Cut and bruised we’re all fucking misused
That is why I’m going to,
I’m going to, I’m going to
Know and know I’m going to know
And when I find out you’ll all be so low
And I’ll be raised! Raised and raised
Know longer misused
…shackles rang
Rang and rang
A contest entry
- Just Come and Take a Look by LadyLionnir.
500 points, ended July 18, 2007, 18 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - ABSTRACT by Midnightmare.
200 points, ended September 16, 2007, 40 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Well this was interesting. I liked how you repeated some of the lines. It gave the poem more...whats the word, character? lol I'm not sure what the word is but its a really nice touch. So anyways, great job keep it up
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already commented but thanks for entering =]
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this was awesome... it sounds so much like something that SOAD would sing. i dont know... its just really good.
good luck in the contest!!! =D -
Hmmm. You repeated certain lines that were my favorite, but you seemed to repeat them a little too much. Even though the poem was altogether a good idea a little polish won't hurt. Good job, anyway and good luck in the contest...thank you for entering.
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