Hidden in the Cards

1

'Reality's like a deck of cards,'
said the stubborn Realist.
'How so?' asked the Idealist,
whose vision was far and wide.

'Well you see," continued the Realist,
willing not to stray far
from the literal truth of the matter.
'There are fifty-two cards and weeks in a year.'

'Aha,' proclaimed the Idealist,
'I think there should be
fifty-three weeks in a year,
because time is fleeting as it is.
'

'But that won't change a thing,'
he replied as realistically as he could.
'You will not gain any extra time
by slicing and dicing the calendar.
'

The Idealist pondered this in silence,
so the Realist continued his spiel.
'There are thirteen cards in each suit,
and of course thirteen new moons a year.
'

'That's simply not enough moons!'
cried the Idealist in a fit.
The Realist let out a giant sigh,
wondering what the problem was now.

'We need thousands of new moons
all made out of cheese,
so that those who are hungry,
shall have something to eat.
'

'My dear dreamer,' said the Realist,
his voice resolute in tone.
'Moons are not edible,
so sadly, many shall starve.
'

'So we shall share our food then!'
screamed the Idealist,
because sharing seemed
to be the obvious solution.

'A noble fantasy,' whispered the Realist,
silencing the screamer.
'Although seventy percent are hungry,
twenty-nine percent simply won't share.
'

A single tear then fell
from the Idealist's eye,
but the Realist couldn't stop now.
His conjecture was not yet complete.2

3

'Reality's most like a deck of cards,' he said,
his voice long free of cheer,
'Because a deck has four suits
that often trump each other.
'

The Idealist covered his ears,
but the Realist's voice penetrated
his shaking fingers.
'And humans play every card in the deck.'

'First of all there's hearts,
but love, tolerance and peace never lasts long.
For instance, it is often corrupted by diamonds,
which represents possession in society.
'4

5

'True love will always win!'
said the Idealist in a spurt of tears.
The Realist shook his head in disagreement,
but kept on going.

'Diamonds are conquered by spades,
which is an inverted heart of darkness,
and let's not forget clubs,
which evil needs to violently conquer possession and peace.
' 6

7

The Idealist fell to his knees,
trembling at the horrible image.
'Love sometimes wins in the end, though,'
said the Realist with a straight face.

The Idealist looked up from his sorrowness,
as hope rekindled behind his weepy eyes.
'It's true,' reaffirmed the Realist.
'Hearts do trump them all from time to time.'

The Idealist grabbed at his knees,
and begged to hear more good things.
He should have known to not push his luck,
because a Realist deals in truth alone.

'Evil and love,
have a fickle relationship.
But there is one who will finally
settle the score between them
.'

'Who will?' urged the Idealist,
who's vision was becoming shorter and near.
His mind was being melded
with horrors that chased his imagination away.

'The third party is technology,
but I shall call him the joker.
He will trump every card in Reality's deck,
until the card game of reality is finished forever.
'8

9

After the Idealist let out a final whimper,
his face matched that of the Realist's.
It wasn't the face of indifference that he normally sported,
but that of a pessimist's frown.10

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  • Midnightmare
    April 13

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    Interesting format and great storyline. I liked the style you wrote this in... it kept me interested.
    I thought I had already commented on this but obviously I hadn't so here I am, lol.
    A good write, keep it up. thanks for entering =]


  • Andrew Timothy
    December 16, 2007
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    Well said.

    "Hear, hear!"

    I'm not quite sure what to say about this; it's very nicely done, but its meaning is a bit lost to me. I like the comparison of life and cards, and the contrast of the two (drasticly emphasized) opposites. The ending bit about the joker led me to think of mankind's end by nuclear--or some other type of war.

    Thanks for entering, Blurith, and goodluck.


  • Oblivion Kitty God silver member
    October 31, 2007

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    A very intersting look at a deck of cards and applying it to reality. But while the analogy is well done, it is complicated. I, personally, enjoy simpler things. I may not always be simple, but simple is better in my opinion. The Idealiest and the Realist are not complete opposites, though they are differents ends of the same spectrum. So, in that respect, your prose fits the requirements of the contest. Thank you for entering and I'll have my decision later.


  • Elvenfairy
    October 15, 2007

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    this was great! Brilliant! I have never thought of how a deck of cards simbolized the world, but you're so rigt, it does

    I think I am more like the realist, it would be nice to think of teh world as all happy and good, but I am not going to delude myself, that just isn't the case. Anyways, I'd right more but I have to go. This was AWSOME! Thanks for enetring my contest, sorry it's taking me so long to judge


  • plurangel silver member
    August 4, 2007
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    weird. is all i have to say.


  • Asfand
    July 11, 2007

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    this was very very good. you used a great, distinguished method of writing, which puts it into a unique sort of category. great job! i really really liked it!


  • Gary Alexander silver member
    July 9, 2007

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    Somehow, the idealist deep inside MY deck
    Thought this was quite show
    "If only rhymes and meter...heck,
    Occasionally would show."
    But, I guess it was YOUR realist won
    Who said "let all this verse be FREE!"
    And this is why it is by you, my son,
    And the cards ain't played by me.

    Good effort,
    Gary A


    • Blurith
      July 9, 2007
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      lol, yes, they were free, I am not the best rhyming poet


  • Mr Pooptastic
    July 9, 2007

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    Hmm

    Being an idealist, I have to say, you really dumped on them and made them look like complete idiots. Idealist are nothing like that in reality, Idealist may be unrealistic but not that unrealistic. When you say the moon is made of cheese thing that's just idiotic, and no real idealist would say that seriously, however, an idealist probably would say people should share their food so that not so many people starve. An idealist isn't completely wrapped in fantasy.

    In my case, I try to do as much as I can for everyone I know, because I believe that ideally everyone should and everyone would be a lot happier in that case. I know not many people will, but thats what makes my goal unrealistic. It's a matter of striving for something that you know won't happen just because you believe it should.

    Anyway aside from that, I liked all of the references and thought it was pretty good. Great metaphors as well.


    • Blurith
      July 9, 2007
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      Hey man, I 100% know most people aren't like that. The idealist and realist were taken to the extremes (almost all people are some kind of mix of the two), and the moon made of cheese was to add comic element to this piece to lighten it up (not intended to say all idealists are wrapped in fantasy, just this particular extreme character in the story)

      Thanks for the intelligent response though. My main objective was to get people to think about the extremes and see where people themselves lie in the spectrum in between (leaning more towards realist/idealist etc.)


  • the wonder girl silver member
    July 6, 2007

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    The only King that has no beard is the King of Hearts :D

    I read somewhere that the four kings were meant to represent the four great rulers.. hearts for King David, diamonds (I think) for machiaveli, clubs for caesar (not sure again about the suit) and... hmm.. forgot the other, lmao

    Bluuuuu! I so love this.. I've been taught how to shuffle and play with cards by age 6 or 7 at some point, I even wanted to be a casino dealer and dupe everyone

    What I love here is that this poem speaks of real things.. you have likened the deck of cards to reality... it IS true... that the idealist creates a lot of "what ifs" and etcs that wouldn't do much to better or change things... a new month won't extend time...

    Tbe suits of cards and the joker.. The way you gave their representations was just wow.. they do play each other... kick each other's asses. My personal favorite is the Suit of Diamonds.. but then again, I guess most women would choose that ^_^

    One other thing that the deck and reality has in common is that we are all numbered.. and ranked - even if we don't want to. Income levels, education, the schools you go to, grades, ID numbers, etc... ^_^

    Great work, blu, this is one of my favorites.. insightful, real, wow.
    Good luck with the contest!


    • Blurith
      July 6, 2007
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      thanks soda

      I was thinking of working in the numbers as well (rankings), because thats true too (guess our great minds think alike ), I just had a lot already. I still might add a couple paragraphs in on that at a later time


  • Rosemary silver member
    July 6, 2007
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    clever story

    Nice correlation between time passing and the amount of cards.

  • TuesdaysChild
    July 6, 2007

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    The realist doesn't seem all that realistic, if he was really realistic he would put idealism in the mix because because in the real world ( lots of reals in this comment) there's always people doing random good things. there certainly is a fine line between pessimism and realism. That was six "reals" in this comment, and it felt like I was writing a tongue twister.
    Good luck.


    • Blurith
      July 6, 2007
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      I agree with you fully that people are usually a mix in some ratio, but for this poem, I showed the extremes on purpose (hence why I used the name Realist instead of the name Fred), and then showed this particular realist's and idealist's true human nature by the end (getting sucked into the negativity), so I don't agree it was that unrealistic. Plus, there are people like the realist who think that way about the examples I provided in the poem (eg. ppl are starving, but it won't change any time soon, it's just the way it is), so I didn't go too overboard with it. I only discussed a couple things, it's not like a character in the novel who only expresses realist's traits through every aspect of life

      However, I am glad it got you thinking on your own personal interpretation, thanks for the thoughtful comment


  • Aya Natsume
    July 6, 2007

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    Great job. I guess realists are bad now. xD. It's a nice poem. Great job and yay for comments!!!

    ~Erin~


  • k8fairy
    July 5, 2007

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    Screw realists! Just because something is reality isn't an excuse not to try change it! That is lazy talk. Oh people are hungry, they will always be hungry, because we are selfish, you don't have to be selfish,my friend hannah feeds the hungry everyday after her job, if you say we shouldn't try because one person can't make a difference, and everyone is selfish, you are lazy! LAZY! LAZY!!!!
    Sorry, guess who is an idealist? Its me.


  • NewGuy90
    July 5, 2007

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    This was satirically ironic. (if that makes any sense at all) I guess that we all wish that the Idealist was right but in the end the Realist holds the most truth. I liked the idea of the joker representing technology which will ultimately over throw humankind. This was a really well constructed poem. This certainly deserve clappy men!

    P.S. good luck in the competition!
    ♥NewGuy90


    • Blurith
      July 5, 2007
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      That's basically the thought process I had for this. Nicely done.


  • Demolition Lovers
    July 5, 2007

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    AHHHH
    This made me a little confused.
    But it was creatively written =)
    Hmmm, you should've had a pessimist in there
    Anybryars. If I were to have two opposing views on one thing, I'd probably kill the story with the view I favor =P

    Anyieros. Good job with this!


    • Blurith
      July 5, 2007
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      the last paragraph was supposed to show the realist's true colors, that of a pessimist, as most realists tend to be that way. I added two lines to made it more clear, but still left it vague enough for personal interpretation

  • Leaf Green
    July 5, 2007

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    It reminds me of a poem of e. e. cummings for some reason, and Lewis Carroll, though I can't remember the poem. Very good and the like.


  • k3nny silver member
    July 5, 2007

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    ummm A nobel fantasy... shouldn't nobel be noble?

    omg x.x this was nice and ummm well researched! I liked it. I'm more of a realist. sometimes a pessimist though. I think for a poem it is good. I think I'd call it a... well, i forgot but there's a name for that.

    Anyway, I liked the kind of contrast. It is a light read and quite pleasant.

    Thanks for writing this! I liked the humor!

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