I'm..
sitting with hands clasped about an ivory chair,
grinning,scheming,at all who dare
resist and rise against my power,
this will be my special hour
One point of the finger
..they collapse to their knees,
and they've melted away
like a soft autumn breeze,
a single feverish,ferocious swipe
against their skin,reveals a mound of intestines and muscle
where the flesh had once been,
They all seem to be the same inside
Piles of corpses, gather height,
and the chaos continues,late into night,
the wolves are howling,yet choking on their kill,
lapping up blood hungrily,against their will,
velvet ravens swoop around,
pecking the flesh scattered carelessly,upon the ground,
and eyes,like marbles,castaway on silver spikes,
torturing the fools and brainless alike,
Adhering to my plan,I do what I can,
to serve the ignorant on a silver platter,
and make them understand the full extent of this matter,
I'm not insane,nor stupid
and though I don't rule quite yet,
if I did they'd learn a lesson they would never..
forget
sitting with hands clasped about an ivory chair,
grinning,scheming,at all who dare
resist and rise against my power,
this will be my special hour
One point of the finger
..they collapse to their knees,
and they've melted away
like a soft autumn breeze,
a single feverish,ferocious swipe
against their skin,reveals a mound of intestines and muscle
where the flesh had once been,
They all seem to be the same inside
Piles of corpses, gather height,
and the chaos continues,late into night,
the wolves are howling,yet choking on their kill,
lapping up blood hungrily,against their will,
velvet ravens swoop around,
pecking the flesh scattered carelessly,upon the ground,
and eyes,like marbles,castaway on silver spikes,
torturing the fools and brainless alike,
Adhering to my plan,I do what I can,
to serve the ignorant on a silver platter,
and make them understand the full extent of this matter,
I'm not insane,nor stupid
and though I don't rule quite yet,
if I did they'd learn a lesson they would never..
forget
Author notes
My favorite pet's name is Winkie and I'm a Gemini
I really don't like when people make fun of you for being a little different..and this is ..a power rant.Ya know,that "if I had super powers I'd make your head explode" sorta thing..it's really just someone destroying all these people and once they're completely mangled,you can see they're the same inside..built off angst,sadness and anger
A contest entry
- Rhyme me some tears! by Midnightmare.
225 points, ended July 6, 2007, 18 entries
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(i totally agree on the hating it when people make fun of you for being different, lol.) anyway, to the poem. i thought the flow as good but a few syllables were missing in places. the rhyming was good and didn't sound too forced. I'm not quite sure what this line means though: "the wolves are howling,yet choking on their kill,
lapping up blood hungrily,against their will," ... it alsmost contradicts itself. if you're hungry you don't really hesitate to eat when you can. but i guess it could make sense if you read it a few times and think about it. but anyway i think it would make it easier to read if you separated the stanzas and grouped them so that the rhyming flows better because you will know when to pause. but thanks so much for entering and well done!!! =D -
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The thing with the wolves meant that the wolves were eternally starving and so will keep eating but never be full..I was aiming for a Dante's inferno sorta thing

I should of been more clear on that I guess..
but thank you for the suggestions and loverly compliments
write on
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