Legend goes

Revan sat across the dimly lit room, watching Elleanna read the most recent book of her favorite series.

"I don't see how you do it" said Revan. "You read, take voice, model, you're in band and much more and yet you still have time for extra activities, you amaze me" he said with the  most sincere of voices.

"I always pray and read my Bible as well" said Elleanna. "I take everything up with God my Father as you should too, you'd be amazed what you can do with his help!" They continued to talk and Revan became a Christian that day. Elleanna went to college and became a counselor. Revan became a priest at the Methodist Church down the road from his parents house where he lived til he was twenty-one. He married Elleanna, bought their own home, and adopted three children who were in danger of being homeless had he not taken them when he did. He and Elleanna had two children of their own and lived a wonderful life. They followed God wherever he lead them and prospered throughout their life their story became a legend in their small town and is still told in the old Methodist church to this day to show what God can do in your life if you surrender to him and let him lead.

"This just goes to show what wonderful things can and will

happen if you have faith in God"

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  • Midnightmare
    July 1, 2007

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    it's very short but i guess that what needed to be said was said. also, in the second "paragraph" or phrase there shouldn't be speech marks after "sincere of voices" at the end.
    and in the eighth line, that is a very long sentence... (Elleanna went to college and became a counselor and Revan became a priest at the Methodist Church down the road from his parents house where he lived til he was twenty-one and married Elleanna and bought their own home and adopted three children who were in danger of being homeless had he not taken them when he did.)perhaps try breaking it down a little bit.
    i liked this story; keep writing and good luck =]