Susan slightly blushed when she saw how shocked Jarred was and lightly sat down next to him. He managed to snag some roses on the way and went ahead and gave them to here. "Aww how sweet. I'm soryy I didnt bring you anything." She giggled nervously.1
"It's o.k. I wasnt expecting anything." He said still in aww over the way she looked. 2
That made her a little more confortable, to know that he was going to be looking at her all night and not another girl like her past boyfriends. She was kind of stunned at his apperance as well. Usually at school (collage) he would wear an open loose shirt and a pair of levi's but now he was wearing a buttoned up black formal shirt with a dark blue pair of jeans that you only wear at a fancy occasion. Although she didnt know why he was so dressed up for, it was a cheep club that they had gone to and didnt look worth while.3
"You look hungry," he tried to say all sophisticated which made her giggle. 4
"Why yes darling I'm famished actually," she said matching his accent.5
"Well lets get out of here," he said dropping the whole cool act.6
"Why not,"she replied."7
As they left the club and started to walk up the street they saw the fanciest restraunt in the whole town, AppleBee's. Jarred turned to Susan, chuckled then straightned up and took escorted her in, like fancy couples do.8
Author notes
con. I dunno. Help needed... writers block... 
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Nice write, though a few errors. minor typos, nothing major: "collage" should be "college". (I'm very sorry you're experiencing writer's block. Write about your personal life for a while, and it'll go away. I figured this trick out recently when I myself had it.
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"Although she didnt know why he was so dressed up for, it was a cheep club that they had gone to and didnt look worth while."
"Although" is like "Because". You don't generally start a sentence with it. I would reword it to something like this:
"She wondered why he was so dressed up, after all, it had been a cheap club they'd gone to and not worthwhile."
I fixed a couple of spelling errors, nothing major. In your last sentence, the last word should techinically be "did" as your story is in the past tense, not present.
Nice write. It's fairly interesting and I am curious as to what happens next....er between here and chapter 5 that is. *mentally kicks herself for not reading from the beginning*
-morgana
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Thanx
why thank you very much.Like I said b4 I've had some major writers block and that does sound like something that I would want to read in a book like this story...
thnx again
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maybe you should write a scene where her and jarred are on a date and shes all dressed up like she is now and she runs into her supposed friends with their dates and instead of all the guys hanging around her friends their hanging around her along with her friends dates. that would make o so jealous. and susan would finally be able to know what it feels like to be popular.
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