Knight Rider: Knight of the Tigress:prologue

In the moonless night, men loaded boxes from a dimly lit warehouse into a box truck. There were guards all around the loading dock where the truck was parked. The men moved at a fast pace; trying not to drop the boxes. A short and balding man stood next to the wall as he watched the men to make sure that they did their job.1

“Watch it!” the short man yelled.2

“All right, boss. No damage done,” replied one of the workers.3

“There's a lot of money in those boxes.”4

Fredrick stood behind a giant dumpster waiting for a chance to sneak into the warehouse. Armed with a loaded gun under his black T-shirt that tucked into his blue jeans and his laces on his black tennis shoes were tight; he was ready. He watched all the activity going on at the warehouse with the last box being loaded. Then the guards jumped into the back of the box truck and pulled down the door. The men left in a different pickup truck driven by the shorter man.5

Now here was his chance to get inside of the warehouse. Fredrick slowly walked to the service door, and then picked the lock. Carefully he entered in the building and closed the door softly to begin his search. He pulled his tiny flashlight out of his pocket, turned it on and walked over to a pile of discarded boxes. 6

Shining his light on the boxes, he tried to get a better look at them.7

“Galaxies Corporation,” he whispered.8

Fredrick turned to his right and saw another pile of unmarked boxes that were a few steps ahead of him. He placed his flashlight in his mouth; carefully, he pulled open the box; tried not to make any loud noises. Then he used his flashlight to look inside the box.9

This can’t be! I thought she destroyed them…10

He placed the flashlight back in his mouth, closed the box, and re-taped it. The service door opened and two men walked in. Then the lights flashed on and Fredrick hid behind the boxes.11

“Get out of my way!” yelled a woman. She had short red hair and wore a red jacket with a silver T-shirt, with navy blue jeans and high heels shoes. 12

It’s her, my enemy the Claw! She was the one who almost killed my friend the Tigress. I must get out of here. I can’t stop her by myself.

Fredrick peeped out through the boxes to get a look at the short man that was with her.13

“I’m telling you, Mr. Dimes. Someone is here!”14

“Claw, I can assure you that no one is here.”15

She put her hand around his throat. “I hired you; you work for me.”16

“I understand,” grasping for his breath.17

“Guards, search this place,” she yelled.18

His heart raced while he looked for a way out. Sweat ran down his back as they inched towards to him. He eased his hand to his gun; a guard saw his movement. Fredrick had been seen as the guard rushed over to him. He pushed the boxes onto the guard, took out his gun, and shot the other guard. The guard flew back and hit the cement floor.19

Two more guards appeared in the service door and pointed their guns at him.20

“Terry, it’s me,” Fredrick said.21

“He doesn’t care anymore,” Claw replied.22

Fredrick turned to look at her. “What did you do?”23

“Nothing at all, I simply gave him a taste of power and he took it.” Claw waved her hand at a guard as he pushed in a stretcher.24

Fredrick’s eyes widened. “If you kill me, my people will stop you.”25

“You’re making me laugh! I’ve killed your people or drugged them.”26

“There is one left…”27

“Yes, I know.” She took out a dart gun, shot him in the arm, and placed the dart gun behind her back. Then Fredrick fell onto his knees. “Guards, lay him on the stretcher.” 28

The two guards walked over, picked him up, and they carried Fredrick to the stretcher. He kicked and punched at the guards as his head began to spin; the guards quickly tied him down onto the stretcher.29

Claw grabbed her briefcase, marched over to Fredrick, placed it on the stretcher. She opened the briefcase, grabbed the syringe, and held it up into the light as the needle shimmered. In that moment, he fought the straps that had him tied to the stretcher.30

Claw began to stroke his hair. “Calm down, this won’t hurt, I promise,” she said softly.31

Fredrick spit in her face; then she slapped him hard.32

“Don’t make me mad, because I will hurt you!”33

“Your orders are not to kill me. Well I’m not going to talk!”34

Claw took her hand and dug her sharp finger nails into his face. She dragged her hand down at a slow pace; she leaned over, and whispered in his ear. “There was nothing said about torture.” 35

Blood ran down his face as the cool breeze stung his open wound. Strange images appeared in his mind while his eyes started to lose their focus. 36

She is going to kill me. I won’t be able to help Tigress. Dear God, send someone to help her against Claw.

“Where is Tigress?”37

“I don’t know…”38

“Where is she?”39

“I don’t know…”40

“You’re still stubborn.” Claw struck the needle into his arm and slowly gave him the drug.41

Fredrick fought one last time. “No…” he yelled then his head dropped.42

“Take him to the cabin,” she said to the guard.43

“Why did he react like that?” Mr. Dimes asked.44

“He knew he was going to die after I’m done with him.” Claw took out her gun from the inside of her jacket and shot Mr. Dimes in the head. “Just like you.”45

Mr. Dimes fell onto the cement floor while blood poured out of his head.46

“What about him?” the guard asked.47

“Leave him.”48

Claw and her guards walked out of the warehouse. She watched her men place the stretcher into the van and then she closed the doors. The motor turned on and in a few minutes, the van drove off. She walked over to the white mustang car, opened the door, and got in.49

She started up the engine and drove to the highway. Then she picked up her car phone to dial a number. Claw listened as the phone was ringing on the other end.50

“Mr. Knight, this is Helen. I’m sorry to bother you this early. I got a phone call from Mr. Dimes.” She paused. “I believe something must’ve happened. He wants you to meet him at his warehouse right away.” She looked into her rear view mirror to move a strand of her hair out of her face. “Yes, I’ll do that.”51

Now I must find a bathroom to change. My plan is working.

Author notes

This story is based on tv show Knight Rider

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  • Lostskins
    March 20

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    I liked the idea and some of it was enjoyable. Sometimes I did feel like I didn't know exactly what was going on or why it was taking place. Maybe some more details and descriptions could help. It has potential to be a great read!


  • Squirt05
    March 17

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    This is a very good story. It was a very different story although, i liked it very much. i liked how it mixed a spy story with a rivalry. My favorite part was when frederick was found and then claw took action. i like how you used lots of description in this story. I cannot wait to read the rest. I agree with murderousgamer that you could change and rephrase parts of the story. Otherwise i loved it.

    . Rewarded 8


  • Tiger-Lily gold member
    March 9

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    Pretty good, but...

    Even tough it was definitely intriguing, in a creepy morbid way, some little things put me off:

    "He placed his flashlight in his mouth; carefully, he pulled open the box; tried not to make any loud noises. Then he used his flashlight to look inside the box.9"

    Try rephrasing that to:

    "He held his flashlight in his mouth, using both hands to pry open the box. He shone his flashlight into its depths..."

    Also,

    "“Yes, I know.” She took out a dart gun, shot him in the arm, and placed the dart gun behind her back. Then Fredrick fell onto his knees. “Guards, lay him on the stretcher.” 28"

    Ty:

    “Yes, I know.” In the next instant, she'd pulled out a dart gun; she shot him in the arm before he cold blink. A stinging sensation flew up his arm, and Fredrick fell onto his knees, suddenly weakened.

    “Guards, lay him on the stretcher.” She calmly tucked her gun back into her pocket, surveying him coldly.

    There are other instances like this, I would've listed them but I've run out of time (dinner!). Hope it helped.

    Overall, you have a really good story, though!

    . Rewarded 8

  • diffirent

    it was different, not something that i would usually read, but I liked it


  • whichcraft Greeters member
    December 30, 2007

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    I have to admit that when I first read your story, I thought it had something to do with a knight - in fantasy, but I wasn't too disappointed. The story was good and written in a comic bookish style.


  • silversword
    December 23, 2007
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    this is good, interesting and captivating ;D

    there is a few lines that could be worded better so as to make the story much more intense. If you would like me to tell you them i would be more than happy too!

    keep up the good work, ill be looking for the next chapters posted in the group.


  • Spartan-015
    November 11, 2007
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    4.5/5

    Sorry it took so long, busy working on Knight Rider 2020.
    You've got a good start here, it catches attention with an 'inside job.' A few grammatical errors here and there, but once you write a story, all you can think is to get it published! I can't wait for KITT! Lemme read on...


  • Faker
    October 18, 2007

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    Sorry it took so long Iv`e been busy, I do like it and the fact that youv`e even brought thwardrobe back from the early 80`s because only in that time period would a woman wear that style of clothes with high heels. I did find it entertaining, I will keep reading!


  • sarahhitch
    August 7, 2007

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    Great job

    You did a great job here Lynn, i see there are a few new bits too.

    must’ve happen(ed)

    Sarah


  • LadyLionnir
    June 28, 2007

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    I love how you kept the reader guessing until the very end, that style of writing always keeps someone interested in the story. All I have to say is that you seem to tell the reader things and not show them. In places, though, the description was very well-written. I realized how good you are with dialogue, I hate to read pieces where the author will say "he said" "she said" over and over again until the story seems boring. You definitely did not do that. It was something I saw...really good! This seems like it could be continued, is that so?


  • MrsJoeJonas909
    June 28, 2007
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    wow

    interesting, violent I like it!!!

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