Come to me
Silently
Empty bed next to me
Come to me
Entity
Enter my room
Come to me
Timidly
Tiptoe in quietly
Sit here beside of me
Sit here, Simplicity
Sit here, Humanity
Sit here in awe of me
Come to me
Sympathy
Enter my room
Love me
With sanctity
Love me
With empathy
Love me
With purity
Love me entirely
Give me your misery
Give me anxiety
Give me your mystery
Twirling beside of me
Come to me
Civility
Come
Serendipity
Come and take hold of me
Enter my room
Author notes
It's a love spell poem thing! ...This is what comes from reading the Llewellyn Magical Alminack. ...It gives me ideas. :-D
In a list
A contest entry
- I'm bored. ...Are you? by Taylor Renee.
350 points, ended July 26, 2007, 21 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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nice rhyme and flow. all though simple, this displays many emotions. gj. and gl in that contest. i mean u r 2nd
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uh..........yea.....it was nice.....it was simlpe and the wording were gud.......
i loved the way u rhymed it......it was very well-thought-out!!!
nice job!!!
CRITICISM
why are the words crammed inside.......soem the words don't make any sense.......ill give u examples........
Sit here, Simplicity
Sit here, Humanity
Give me your misery
Give me anxiety
Give me your mystery
i dont find them quite suitable for a love poem or something......theya dd that depressed touch that soooooo dont need!!!
apart form that i think its gud and unique!!!
nice job again!!!
CHEERS and GUD LUK!!!
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I loved this.
It was so pretty and just....powerful and beautiful.
You get brownie points, new stories rock
I just...idk how to explain this. I really think this was a wonderful poem. I really really love it.
You seem to be a terrific poet.
Anyway, maybe I'll try to explain and comment better later
As of now, you're a finalist
Thanks for entering and good luck!
xoxo
Tay
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