Am I worthy of love?
Of life?
Of happiness?
After all I've said, and all I've done,
Am I truly worthy,
Of your freindship?
Am I truly worthy,
Of your love?
In any form?
What makes me, the one
Who has hurt you so deeply,
Who has broken your trust,
Worthy of even knowing you?
Author notes
A very personal poem, this was from my crazy period. Concerning my relationship with my boyfreind, whom I broke up with for no reason, I was at a very low point. I still don't think I'm worthy of him but he disagrees and that's all that matters.
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Comments
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nawww thats so sweet
i reali liked it
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This is a good poem but I think there could be more to it. Its short but covers suck a large subject. Although if you wrote this in your 'crazy period' you may not be able to add on to it now anyway. Its a good poem. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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I'd disagree with you too on that point. You seem quite a nice guy. Of course I wasn't witness to your 'crazy period.' lol
I like the poem. Short but not too sweet.beginning: 4, language: 5, ending: 4.
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Wow. This is a good poem. Not expressed enough, but good. I'm too tired to notice any mistakes
Thanx for entering and good luck.
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I really loved this poem. It's so emotional and actually made me cry. I just really enjoyed reading this poem. You are really good and I wish I could be just as good as you someday.
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i like it overall. thought you have rough corners that could need clearing up and polishing. the starting was great, if anayzed it's the best way to start, though the ending could use a lil help, i dont like the ending, the whole poem is left in questions, there is unneded ambiguity that makes it all confusing,
u shud ask, why would one read a story just to listen to questions, where's the sum up, where's u....other then that...i think it's a neat idea! good job!! -
I agree you should cut line 9
You could strengthen the ending by changing it to a statement, something like
No, I choose to believe I am worthy of your love, your friendship, knowing such a special person as you.
This way it would show growth throughout the poem -
I like this poem. I think every one comes to a point where they don't feel worthy of the loved ones they have. I know I have. I think that the 7th line, repeating "Am I truly worthy" should be cut out. It'll keep the flow consistent all the way through. And line 9 is really bad, I dunno why, but I don't like it there. All in all the poem is great and the beginning and end really touch my heart.
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