Leaves crunched underneath her feet. A jade eye flickered at me through the wavy mass of auburn hair, tousled by the wind.
"Sígueme," she said, fronds grazing her olive skin. She glowed in the moonlight.
"¿Dónde... dónde está la cascada?" My Spanish was terrible.
"Casi," she said. Almost.
The path widened. Sounds of the river water grew louder. Mist shimmered on her curves. The crunching of leaves beneath our feet disappeared, replaced by the soft padding of bare foot on rock.
She looked back at me, meeting my eye with hers, then disappeared into the waterfall.
Two wet footprints remained above the cascade. The mist caressed my face. "Estamos aquí," it said.
Author notes
Option 9
I wrote in the Spanish because I figured what she was saying had little or no importance, but in case you were wondering...
La cascada -- "the waterfall"
sígueme -- "Follow me."
"¿Dónde está...?" -- "Where is...?"
"Estamos aquí." -- "We are here."
Sorry for the confusion
A contest entry
- Fandi Contest I - Options by Asfand.
225 points, ended July 10, 2007, 42 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - Short and Sweet by abba12.
175 points, ended October 2, 2007, 38 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
1 - 8 of 8
-
why does she say follow me before he asks where the waterfall is? its a cute little story, and i like how she disapears into the waterfall, but i guess i kinda miss the point of it
-
hehe.....spanish sounds sooo cute and adorable!!! okay well.....now that i finally understand where the story is going!!!
Molto bravisimo.......in italian......no wait....i think that means very delicious.......yea well.....who cares......neway......very nice story!!!
CHEERS and GUD LUK!!! -
-
thank ya
-
-
Hey, this was uh..mucho bien?? i THINK that means very good? I have no clue. Anyways, nice job, and good luck in the contest.
Luv, IMqueen
-
-
muy bien
and thanks for the comment
-
-
well..........i.....i umm........i dont understand spanish!!!!
other then that.......the english is very well-written!!! -
-
Thanks :)
I went back and edited in some translations in my author's comment... sorry for the confusion
-
-
tres bien
beginning: 5, language: 5, plot: 3, ending: 5, dialog: 3, characters: 2.
Adding your comment:
1 - 8 of 8
