Cold

As I let his cold hand slip from mine, I died too.

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  • Taylor Renee
    June 26, 2007

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    This was one of the shortest in the contest but it was really good!
    I think you conveyed such a powerful message it was really beautiful.
    Great job on this!
    Good luck in the contest, I wish you well!
    xoxo
    Tay


  • Embitter
    June 25, 2007

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    Dramatic and tragic.. but they held on till the end, so its still very touching,...so much missing from it, yet, in one line... the meaning is there.. good work