Along the road there was a car, and in this car sat a man- not really a typical man, but that doesn't really matter; what really matters is what he was doing, and what he was doing is so terribly inexcusable that it can not even be uttered, however, I will tell you this: there was a body in the back of his car.
Author notes
*cough* Thanks to whoever invented commas and all the other sentence joiners
I was reading this to myself, and it be awesome if George Clooney did a voice over for this jk lol
A contest entry
- Nano Stories by Embitter.
175 points, ended July 2, 2007, 30 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest - I'm bored. ...Are you? by Taylor Renee.
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Hmmm Mr. Clooney you say? *calls in a favor to her beloved uncle* Yeah, Uncle Shawn can you do a voice over with George by...hmm...let's say next week? You can? Great! Love ya, bye.
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Like oh my gosh! COOL!!!
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Yay!
This us ab anononmous contest...but I know this is yours
I loved this sentence....I mean story
Thanks a lot for entering it!
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Very interesting. A very long sentence, but as you said thank goodness for sentence joiners. Good luck in the contest. God Bless!
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Lol, yeah I wrote it like that so it'd be some-what humorous
One of my friends once had to write a whole-page story in just one sentence, so this isn't much compared to that
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Indeed for sentence joining. The idea came from an essay we were assigned to write that had to be one sentence.. x_x....
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lol. Punctuation is indeed a welcome friend. If you ever decide to turn this into a longer story, however, I'd totally suggest dividing that into 2 or 3 seperate sentences. :-D
Great idea, though. I love stories about evil people. -
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Yeah, that'd be a must, lol.
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This. Was. So. Awesome
I love the concept of this
...Kinda freaky though. A dide in the bak of his car...now where have I heard that before
It sorta confused me : "...not really a typical man, but that doesn't really; what really matters..."
It was suppost to mean "...but that doesn't really matter," right???
Other than that, I liked it
xoxo
Good luck!!!
Tay
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