Don't waste your time on a smile
you know I have no need to see.
I feel like I'm standing on trial
for a crime that's been done against me.
There's a balance we've slowly been losing
between life and a hell of our choosing--
What heaven could we be refusing
when we eat of the fruit from this tree?
Don't waste your time building a prison
to lock up your love in your heart:
for the pain that is newly arisen
will tear at the walls from the start.
The tomorrow we need isn't coming,
there's no cure for the pain you are numbing,
and we can't go through life falsely humming
when inside we are falling apart.
I won't waste my life on this romance--
we can see that it's nowhere near true.
We knew from the start we had no chance
of fighting our scattered way through.
We have eaten the fruit of this tree,
but it's bitter as bitter can be
and the only things left here of me
are some crumbling memories of you.
A contest entry
- Best of StoryWrite: Published by Phantasmix.
100 points, ended June 26, 2007, 15 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful poem, I LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!
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I don't think I can say anything useful since I think my calibre of writing poetry is inferior compared to yours
but I just have to tell you how beautiful this is.. I've read a number of your works, and each one amazes me ^_^
This poem is beautifully written, the rhyme and flow just seemed so natural, and I found that your poem seems deeper and more personal when said out loud Your poem speaks of true things, too... Some people do hold on to loves that won't do them good - I've seen that in real life, and it is sad how it wastes away people and even friendship.. crumbling memories - it is one way of looking at memories, those that we hold on - they DO crumble... and it depends on the person whether or not that which would be left is purely good or purely bad.. ^_^
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Please tell me your username. I need to include this in the book.
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Bitter Irony--or, if you prefer, Megan "Bitter Irony" Arkenberg.
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Oh.. What a wonderful piece.. The rhyme scheme blows my mind.. the words.. wonderful. The bitter fruit metaphor was really effective in holding it together.. and the ending. Fantastic.
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