As he held the hand of some other girl and I held the hand of some other boy, I looked at him and we both knew--it wasn't supposed to end this way.
Author notes
I don't know. I was just thinking of something like this when I saw this contest and thought I'd enter it.
In a list
A contest entry
- Nano Stories by Embitter.
175 points, ended July 2, 2007, 30 entries
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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awwwwww....this is so sweet and sad i love that you put so much...i gueess emotion into it bravoo!!!! Luvvyyaa~!!~
~emmy!~♥~!
P.s seriously i'm gunna call you but you have to answer!!
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i...wow. this was perfect, and real, and very very totally awesome. i know how that is, and i love the whole simplicity of it.
As he held the hand of some other girl and I held the hand of some other boy, I looked at him and we both knew--it wasn't supposed to end this way.
that's just..perfect. wow. ♥♥♥
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thanks again!
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welcome again!
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ily♥
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That was sad, but I hope it has a happy ending!
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wow
That's really beautiful writing. I loved the uses of repetition and alliteration (as He Held the Hand....). Great job with this.
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This was so pretty!! It was sad
It reminded me of song lyrics.
It makes me want more!!! You should so continue it!!!
Good luck in the contest!
xoxo
Great job!
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Aww... tragic indeed. but in a different way.. you could extend this piece, and use an akward writing style to play up the whole 'this isn't right' sort of feel you havehere.
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Wow, very impressive. It's one sentence and still it's completely amazing!
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Excellent. Very heartfelt and brilliant. I think we've all felt this way before while looking at someone we love but can't have.
Very nice, good luck!
~Kevan!~
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Hey, thanks. and I know.
yourockmytotallyjust-washedsocks!--♥->
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