Teenage Mistakes. Ch. 3

That's right. Cara was pregnant. The responsible, bright, intelligent young woman was pregnant. She had just awoken from the horrible night's thrashing to the warmth of the sun streaming through the curtains. She should be happy. She's got a baby inside of her. But she's not and the worse part of it was she wasn't sure who the father was. This was why Galen had left. He was the first person she called.

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"Galen, I need you now," she said, still holding the pregnancy test in her hand. It clearly read "Pregnant" across the little screen. It even had a smiley face.

"What's wrong?" he asked as he tried not to sound worried, although he had not succeeded.

"Just.. Just get here as soon as possible, please?" Cara began to cry.

"Okay. I love you baby," he whispered ever so softly into his phone.

"I hope so," she replied as she hung up before he could ask any questions.

Within in minutes, Galen was bursting through her bedroom door. He no longer knocked and had his own key. They had been together for what seemed like eternity, Cara's parents just got tired of hearing him throw rocks at her window.

"Talk to me," he demanded.

"I love you, Galen. I love you so much," she sobbed, giving up on trying to stop the tears.

He knelt in front of her and began to wipe the tears from her eyes. Wrapping his arms around her, he hummed the beginning to their favorite song "Chasing Cars" by Snow Patrol. He stroked her hair and looked around.

That's when he saw the empty box, the box that held the pregnancy test. Letting Cara go, Galen grabbed it, "What's this?"

"Oh Galen. I've been sick and it's been over a month since I got my period. Galen, I'm pregnant," she bawled.

Galen jumped for joy. He was so excited. Although he was scared and wasn't sure how things would work out, he was going to be a father, even if he was only nineteen, "Oh baby, I love you so much. I couldn't be happier."

Cara just sat there and cried some more. She just let him have his moment of joy. Then, finally, he asked why she wasn't happy and she began the task of telling him what he didn't want to hear, "Do you remember the night at that party? The one we got into a fight at and broke up for a couple of days?"

"Yeah..." his voice trailed off. He remembered that night, despite the fact he wished he didn't. That night and the following three days were the worst of his life. He then remembered her confessing that she had slept with some random guy after he left. But that was...six weeks ago.

He began to cry. What else was he supposed to do? The love of his life was pregnant and had no idea who the father was. Walking to the corner of the room, he hung his head and sobbed like a baby. What if it wasn't his? Thoughts were running a 5k in his head. "How could she do this to me? Did they not use a condom? I know I forgave her for sleeping with the guy, but how do I get over this?" The more he thought about it, the angrier he got. He really loved her and she got knocked up and couldn't even say it was his. How? Why?

"I know you're not happy with me. I don't blame you. You have idea as to how horrible I feel. You were the first person I called. I want you to know I love you and I want you to be here. No matter who the father is, I want you be the daddy," Cara slowly got up from the bed and stood behind him. She wanted to hug him and kiss him and make things better.

That's when he turned on her. Galen, the loving, caring, perfect boyfriend, hit her. It wasn't lightly either; there was a stinging feeling on Cara's face. It was the worse feeling in the world. "How could you do this to me?" he spat, venom flowing from his lips. With that, he was gone.

Galen fled out of Cara's house. He climbed in his car, his blood boiling with a rage he'd never felt. He peeled out of her driveway and that was that.

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That was only last night. Cara wasn't even out of bed and was already crying. She now had to face the troubles of telling her parents. That wouldn't be as bad as the previous night. Her parents had already told her that if she ever got pregnant, they'd help. The only problem was what she was going to say when she told them about the baby's father issue.

She walked down the stair into the massive kitchen. Well, massive was an overstatement, but it was bigger than anything Cara had cooked in before. To her it was massive and that's how things were going to stay. Her parents, Jesse and June, were sitting at the table drinking coffee. To the coffee pot Cara went for her own morning dose.

After getting her coffee, she kissed each of her parents, wishing them a good morning, and plopping down next to June with a sigh.

"Is everything okay, honey?" June asked, looking a bit worried when she saw the tear stains on Cara's cheeks.

"I need to talk to you guys, actually," she whispered, looking into the depths of her coffee cup, hoping there'd be an escape in the there.

"I'm--" she began. She was cut off by the morning news that had been on in the background.

"There has been an accident in Lawrencedale this morning. The accident was reported around three o'clock this morning," the news anchor said in his monotone voice. "A vehicle was said to have been traveling at speeds of eighty miles per hour or so when it collided with another car, head on. The speeding vehicle was carrying only one person, the driver, who is a young male, said to be about age nineteen.

The other car was carrying three passengers. The driver and passenger, a male and female in their thirties, were rushed to the Lawrencedale General as soon as ambulances arrived on scene. The passenger in the back seat of the red Mini Cooper walked away with minor injuries. However, injuries for the other two and the driver of the Mustang were said to be fatal...."

Cara drowned the rest of him out as she watched with horror in her eyes. The wreckage was being broadcast and she saw what was left of the Mustang that was driven by none other than Galen.

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Another cliffhanger and another late night write. There will be more to come, I promise. Also, if you noticed, the new title has been installed. If you can think of something better, please, feel free to share =]

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  • Frozen Angel
    July 26, 2007

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    I liked it...I think I know what will happen next in the long run...I can't wait to read more, I love it! Great job!

    *Frozen Angel*


  • Chemical Imbalance silver member
    July 13, 2007

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    You don't want to start a sentence with 'and' or 'but'.

    It was clearly read "Pregnant" across the little screen. ...take out was in that and the sentence flows better.

    If you are going to have the character doing actions after the he said/she said in dialog...you need a comma after said or w/e word u use there.

    I'm not a fan of the caps being used for yelling. I know that's how it is in chat speak but let your puncuation and words express what your characters are feeling.

    Now for the content:

    I think you went through Galen's two totally different reactions too fast. Which gave it a air of unbelievablity. I think if you fleshed out that part it would be great.

    Bar that, I really liked the car accident idea in this. Your writing flows well and you have a good handle on getting emotion to show through your work. Good job. Just touch it up a bit and you'll have a really good piece here. Thanks for entering the contest and good luck!



  • LadyLionnir
    June 25, 2007
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    Wow...there's a lot of action in here and very unexpected things...I love it! Good job!


  • Ziee..
    June 25, 2007

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    Wow! I loved all three of these, Awww, Cara seems se messed up, make Galen be okay and then they fall in love again Write more!! and let know when you have

  • Kalamina
    June 25, 2007

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    Honestly, even though Galen was mad, he used alot of bad language that wasn't necessary.
    Good cliff hangers, but very depressing.
    I think that your description was alot better in this one then the others, so for that, good job!


    • Another Sad Song
      June 25, 2007
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      He's a teenager. Teenagers use some nasty language. I know I'm guilty of talking like that when I'm angry, so that's what I was going off of.

      Depressing is what I'm going for. =]

      I'm glad my description has improved. I'll be sure to go back and fix the other two. =]

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