Stolen Humanity

Eyes can see, but they may
be deceived.
For the truth, can be lost in lies
and fear.1

I cannot bear to see you fall so far.
You are the one and only one for me.
Why can't I see, where did I go wrong?
All I know now is that it's long and gone.2

I don't know, why do I even try?3

All I can do is move along in shame.
Praying to God that I will be okay.
Crumbling down right before my eyes
All I had trust, became my demise.4

Where am I now?
I'm in the dark.
I need a light,
Help me please.5

How can this be?
I've lost my way
In a labrynth of my
Stolen humanity.6

Bring me back, from the depths
of my sin.
For I, have changed, in the light
of new life.

Author notes

These are the lyrics to a song I composed and played on piano. You can find the actual music (without lyrics) at:

http://youtube.com/watch?v=7ljCX0nLZCw

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  • UnEdibleChick
    March 15, 2008

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    This is pretty good. Well written. I'm glad you entered my contest and that goes to everyone who entered. Keep up the great work.


  • Xtclozer-
    February 28, 2008

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    I loved it. The emotional pull was very strong in this, I would love ot hear the music along with it. I thinK i shall listen.

    Good job Thanks for entering.


  • I Dare to Dream
    December 27, 2007

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    Excellent job here. I love the hope in the end, the confusion, that slight feeling of despair.

    Liked it, a LOT!

    Good luck!


  • Hinata-is-me silver member
    October 27, 2007
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    wow. this is amazing good luck in my contest. You stand a good chance of winning! nice job


  • darkpaintedreams
    September 28, 2007

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    Thanks for entering this in my contest. I liked this piece, it was different. It's also pretty cool how you made and composed the music for it. Great job on this and good luck in the contest.

  • lunki
    August 15, 2007

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    i realy like the religous imagery in this piece. very sophisticated and deep. You should post it on the club page.

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