An old record player sits in the hall, on an old, dusty, antique dresser. Beside it is a picture of your family, smiling beneath the dusty glass. A door at the end of the hall is ajar, with a light flickering constantly inside.1
You open your door, and head for the bathroom, to get ready for bed. It's pitch black, save for the flickering light at the end of the hall, you bump into the dresser with the old record player on it, and fall backwards.2
Shaking your head you pick yourself up and continue for the bathroom, at the end of the hall, with the flickering light.3
Inside the bathroom, the dull, puke green walls, eerily seem to close in around you, sending chills up and down your spine. You shrug this feeling off, and apply toothpaste to your pink toothbrush. Thunder Rumbles in the distance.4
You turn on the faucet, and lather soap onto your face, and rinse it all off with crisp, well water.5
Drying your face, you notice the water in the sink is turning red, the mirror in front of you, shows you that you have a bloody nose.6
There is a flash of lightning, and a roll of thunder, and in the mirror is a girl, her face twisted in anger, pain and agony, her eyes gored out, and her whole body is bleeding, her ragged clothes, resemble PJ's...Tigger ones...Just like yours.7
Her hair is black and messy, coated in her own blood, long and to her shoulders...just like yours.8
There is another flash of lightning and she is gone, and you look in the mirror and your face begins to change, your face is now scratched up and bleeding, your lips are coated in your think blood, your hair is bleeding, and you begin to loose site, as your eyes disappear.9
There is a flash of lightning and you feel your body connect with the tiled floor, and the sink above overflows with the blood of yourself.10
There is a rumble of thunder, and the old record player begins to play...11
"You are my sunshine...my only sunshine...you make me happy, when skies are grey..."12
And the power fails, as there is another flash of lightning.13
Author notes
It was inspired by the song at the end. I can get a horror story out of a happy song...xD
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Comments
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Wow ... very twisted, and macabre and whatnot. I love how you use the "sunshine" song because that just makes the story all the more creepy, when you have these totally inocuous songs juxtaposed with really horrible things ... I'm a sucker for stuff like that, lol. Awesome write.
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Thanks Both of you, I realize it is a bit choppy, I'm still working on smoothing everything out. This was only written in 10 minutes. and I was also trying a new kind of writing style. Hehe. <3
So yeah, I will try and smooth things out and get a main character in there. ^^; -
"The other night dear, as I lay sleeping/I dreamed I held you in my arms/But when I awoke, dear, I was mistaken/So I hung my head and I cried./You are my sunshine, my only sunshine/You make me happy when skies are gray/You'll never know dear, how much I love you/Please don't take my sunshine away/I'll always love you and make you happy,/If you will only say the same./But if you leave me and love another,/You'll regret it all some day:/You are my sunshine, my only sunshine/You make me happy when skies are gray/You'll never know dear, how much I love you/Please don't take my sunshine away/You told me once, dear, you really loved me/And no one else could come between./But not you've left me and love another;/You have shattered all of my dreams:/You are my sunshine, my only sunshine/You make me happy when skies are gray/You'll never know dear, how much I love you/Please don't take my sunshine away/In all my dreams, dear, you seem to leave me/When I awake my poor heart pains./So when you come back and make me happy/I'll forgive you dear, I'll take all the blame./You are my sunshine, my only sunshine/You make me happy when skies are gray/You'll never know dear, how much I love you/Please don't take my sunshine away"
"Oh, Brother, Where Art Thou?" happens to be on T.V. right now
but anyway just felt like posting those, 'cuz based on the full lyrics, I've never really thought that song is at all that happy...this is pretty good as it is, but I think you could make this story even better...'cuz right now it seems a bit sketchy like FreedomFighter said...like maybe explain why that songs playing? lost love/got killed/now wants revenge type of deal? something else? it's fine the way it is, but if you made the story a bit less choppy and added in some details to give the story some depth, I bet this could become a really, really amazing short horror story.
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Now, I was very interested in this story, because of the title. My brother, when he was like 3, would sing that song with my parents. This story is a bit sketchy, I don't think people like being the main character, but you could turn this around to have it actually be fiction. Changing this story to take place with a set character would help it, and it would make it more interesting. Good luck
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