my fear

The fear

I lay thinking, trying to block out the fear

The silence so loud I can not hear

Slowly it rises, slithering as a snake

Coiling its way up from the pit of my stomach

I dare not move

Before I know it, it’s around my neck

I can’t breath, can’t think, can’t stop it

I lie motionless in the blackness of the room

Its here, I know it! Now I am short of breath

My heart is thumping, the blood pulsing through my veins

Now I am lost stuck “what can I do”

I can’t think clear

I hold my breath hoping it will go away. But it doesn’t

There still is silence but yet I still can not hear

The minuets pass like hours

I don’t think it will ever end

I can’t take this any more

Am I going round the bend?

But suddenly its over as the light begins to appear

Soaring through my bedroom melting that horrible fear

Now it goes into hiding to await its next attack

And I know it will only be hours before it starts to come back.

Author notes

my fear is the actule feeling of fear when im alone at night

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  • FRIENDSfanatic
    June 21, 2007
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    it's alright, you clearly put thought into it. Overall, the poem didn't really stand out because I felt that you didn't SHOW me how you felt, you just sort of explained it as it happened. There was not much creativity with your wording, and that is what is going to make a good poem, it's all about the word choice.
    goodluck