“Something… Every night”

• I want to sleep
But I can’t
I need to sleep
But I can’t
I have to sleep
But I can’t
I try to sleep
But I can’t
I go to sleep
But I can’t
I fall asleep
Soon I wake up

• Something haunts me down
Every single night
Something tears me apart
Every time I but my head down
Something keeps me awake
Everything I need to sleep
Maybe it’s my dreams
For I have no dreams
Maybe it’s my heart
For I have no heart
But this thing keeps me awake
Every single night

• I want to tell
But just don’t know why
I want to say
But just don’t know what
I want to sleep
But just don’t know how
I want to know
But I just don’t know who
That comes and haunts me down
Every single night

• Thoughts rage in my brain
I slam my head and go insane
Tears fall from my eyes
Something triggers my cries
Something ignites my pain
Boiling blood in my vein
Something keeps me awake
My body dead, but eyes opened wide
Something keeps me awake
Something forbids me from my sleep
Every time I lay my head
On my pillow
And try to sleep
Something haunts me down
Every single night

Author notes

option 4: Write a poem about your greatest fear, and tell me what the fear is in your author's note. I would prefer fears more complex than spiders, or shots, or such.

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  • Blurith
    June 21, 2007

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    Your words ring true to last night when I couldn't friggen sleep. I liked the quick repetition, really kept me engaged, like a fast heart beat during a run

    good write


  • FRIENDSfanatic
    June 21, 2007

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    it's alright, I think you were a bit too repetetive though (not in a good way). You said 'something' so many times that it became frustrating to read. I think you could improve this with more creative word choice, but that's about it. Good job, and good luck in the contest


  • Blackwings
    June 21, 2007

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    OMGNESS!!! Beautiful (as always.) BUt sad BUt I loved it all the same!!! IT was sooo good I liked the sad feeling in this it makes you identifye with this peice Great job


  • caitecola
    June 21, 2007

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    This is great! It describes exactly how I feel sometimes, when I, too, find myself struggling to close my eyes.

    I love your word choice, and your style is captivating. I congratulate you on a job well done.
    Creativeexplorer


  • SageSyren Greeters member
    June 21, 2007

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    'My body dead, but eyes opened wide.' Should it be 'My bodies dead' or 'My body dies' ?
    Other than that line I thought this was great. Good luck in the contest.
    Brooke

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