The Winter Cabin

Abby  had  been  skiing  for  the  first  time  at  Mission  Ridge  Ski  resort  in  Washington  State,  and  now  she  was  laying  at  the  bottom  of  the  ski  hill  squeezing  her  ankle  in  pain,  wishing  she  had  never  even  thought  about  doing  this.  As  she  tried  to  get  up,  she  felt  dizzy  but  could  see  the  face  of  a  stranger,  who  although  she  had  never  seen  before,  brought  a  sense  of  relief  throughout  her  body. 1

'Are  you  okay?'  asked  a  deep  voice.2

'Yes,  I  feel  dizzy  and  I  think  I  have  sprained  my  ankle  but  besides  that,  I  think  I  will  be  alright '  replied  Abby.3

'My  name  is  Brad.  Here,  Let  me  help  you   up.'  He  said.4

He  reached  for  her  hand  and  pulled  her  up  with  all  the  strength  he  had. 'Here,  rest  on  my  shoulder.'  Brad  told  her. '  I  will  take  you  to  my  place  so  you  can  warm  up,  it's  only  a  mile  from  here,  I  will  drive'.5

As  they  slowly  made  their  way  to  the  car,  they  asked  each other  questions  and  both  were  feeling  an  automatic  attraction  to  one  another. 6

'How  old  are  you?',  asked  Brad.7

'I'm  fifteen',  replied  Abby. '  How  old  are  you?'8

' Oh,  I'm  nineteen. '9

'What  are  you  doing   in  Washington  anyway?',  asked  Abby.10

' I  live  here  in  Washington.  I  have  a  cabin  of  my  own.  I've  been  on  my  own  for  two  years  now.',  said  Brad.11

' Really?,  Well,  I'm  just  visiting.  This  is  my  mom's  favorite  vacation  spot.  We  leave  tomorrow  afternoon  though.'12

Once  they  arrived  at  the  small  two  door  car,  Brad  opened  the  door  and  placed  her  in  the  passenger's  seat.13

'Thank  you.',  she  said  as  he  shut  the  door.14

He  walked  around  to  the  drivers  side  of  the  car,  got  in,  and  within  minutes  they  arrived  at the cabin. It  was  beautiful.  The  oak  that  made  up  it's  exterior  was  finely  crafted,  and  the  windows  sparkled  in  the  sunlight.  A  small  smoke  rose  above the  roof,  obviously  coming  from  a  fireplace  burning  inside.15

' This  is  where  I  live.' He  said.16

'It's  beautiful!'  Abby  replied,  still  in  amazement  at  the  cabin's  beauty  and  perfection.17

Abby  walked  in  and  she  was  greeted  with  a  warm  feeling  of  happiness.  She  felt  comfortable  for  the  first  time  in  her  life. She  had  always dreamed  of  having  a  nice  guy  take  care  of  her  and  a  beautiful  place  to  live,  with  a  baby  that  they  would  play  with,  love,  and  cherish.  This  to  her, was  just  a  miracle,  it  was s the  setting  of  her  dream  life.18

' So,  Where's  your  wife? '  Asked  Abby,  as  she  looked  around  the  cabin  carefully,  taking  in  all  the  details  to  use  in  her  dreams  to  come.19

' I'm  not  married,  I'm  living  the  single  life  right  now.'  Brad  said. ' I'm  waiting  for  that  special  someone.'20

Brad  and  Abby  turned  to  each other  and  smiled.  They  knew  that  something  was  growing  between  them,  and  the  tension  and  excitement  grew  more every  minute  they  were  together.21

' Would  you  like  some  hot  chocolate?',  asked  Brad,  pointing  to  the  small  kitchenette.22

'Sure!',  replied  Abby,  who's  young,  curious  eyes  were  now  taking  in  every  detail  of  Brad's  body.23

Brad  made  some  hot  chocolate  and  accompanied  it  with  a  blanket  to  wrap  around  Abby.24

'Here  you  go,  It's  hot,  and  I  hope  you  like  marshmellows! '25

'You  better  believe  it!',  Abby  said  as  she  chuckled.26

Brad  and  Abby  looked  each other  in  the  eyes  and  the  tension  was  finally  at  it's  peak. The  kiss  between  them  was  inevitable,  and  when  it happened,  they  could  not  control  themselves.  Being  in  a  cabin,  a  romantic  setting,  and  the  feeling  of  love  for  the  first  time  flowing  through  Abby's body,  she  was  under  Brad's  control.  He  ran  his hands  through  her  hair  as  they  kissed  more  passionately.  His  hand  was  now  exploring  elsewhere,  and Abby  was in  a  trance,  under  the  influence  of  love.  Almost  an  hour  later,  Abby  was  no  longer  a  virgin,  and  neither  was  Brad.27

Afterwards,  Abby  realized  that  she  had  been  gone  for  a  couple  of  hours  and  had  to  get  back  to  the  ski  resort  before  her  parent's  got worried  enough  to  call  the  police,  or  something  outrageous.  28

' I'm  sorry,  I  have  to  go,  My  mom  and  dad  would  kill  me  if  they  knew  that  I  was  over  here  with  a  guy.  Listen,  I'm  leaving  tomorrow,  give  me your  address  and  I  will  keep  in  touch.  I  had  a  great  time,  thank  you  for  everything!'  They  exchanged  addresses  and  as  Abby  handed  hers  to Brad, he  kissed  her  hand  gently.29

She  walked  to  the  cabin  door  and  turned  the  knob,  and  then  proceeded  to  walk  through  the  snow  a  mile  back  to  the  resort.  Abby  had  a  weird feeling,  but  wasn't  sure  what  it  was.  As  she  walked  home  with  her  hand's  in  her  jacket  pockets,  she  was  hoping  that  her  mom  and  dad  weren't  out looking  for  her  and  would  catch  her  walking  back.  They  didn't.  When  Abby  reached  the  ski  resort  she  walked  up  to  her  mom  and  said  'Hey!'30

' Where  have  you  been  young  lady!?  We  have  been looking  for  you  everywhere!'31

' Oh,  I  went  and  put  my  ski's  up  and  got  a  bite  to  eat,  I  was  hungry.'  replied  Abby,  trying  to  come  up  with  the  most  believable  excuse.32

'Well,  You  know  better  than  to  just  run  off  like  that. '33

'Yes  mom, I  know.'  Replied  Abby.34

The  next  morning  Abby  woke  up  and  grabbed  some  pancakes  and  some  toast  for  breakfast.  She  knew  they  would  have  a  long  ride  home  back  to  Arkansas,  so  before  they  left  she  wanted  to  see  Brad  just  one  last  time.35

' I  will  be  right  back  mom!  I  shouldn't  be  long '.36

'Hurry  back,  We  are  getting  ready  to  leave'.  yelled  Abby's  mom  from  the  kitchen.37

Abby  ran  out  of  the door  in  her  white  sweater  and  sweat  pants  and  slammed  the  door  behind  her.  She  jogged  to  Brad's  house  in  the  snow,  which was  a  mile  from  her  own  vacation  house,  but  to  her,  it  was  worth  it.  She  knew  it  would  be  another  year  before  she  would  see  him  again  and  so she  wanted  to  spend  as  much  time  with  him as  she  could.  She  was  in  love  with  him  and  she  knew  that  he  must  have  felt  the  same  about  her  or else  what  happened  the  previous  day  would  not  have  happened.38

It  was  a  long  walk  to  Brad's  cabin,  but  when  she  arrived,  she  walked  in  to  see  Brad  still  sleeping.  He  had  fallen  asleep  on  his  couch  and didn't  even  hear  Abby  walk  in. 39

' I  love  you...',  whispered  Abby  in  his  ear.40

'What,  Huh!?',  Screeched  Brad  as  he  woke  up  from  an  obvious  nightmare.41

' I  love  you,  Don't  you  love  me?'  asked  Abby  with  a  sweet  grin  on  her  face.42

' Yes...  I  do.  I  didn't  mean  to  jump  up  like  that,  I  was  in  the  middle  of  a  nightmare...'.  They  looked  each  other  in  the  eyes  and  once  again  could not  control  their  hormones.  This  time  it  felt  so  much  better  to  Abby,  because  Brad  had  told  her  she  was  his  first.  Brad  was  also  equally  excited when  Abby  told  him  the  same  thing.  Abby  had  never  felt  love  before,  and  had  certainly  never  felt  how  sex  felt  before.  What  they  shared  together was  special.  When  they  were  done  making  love  for  the  second  time,  she  kissed  Brad  on  the  forehead  and  told  him  that  she  loved  him  once  more. ' I  will  keep  in  touch  through  mail,  Don't  forget  about  me!' She  said,  staring  into  his  eyes  as  they  laid  down   holding  each  other  on  the  couch.43

' How  could  I  ever  forget  about  you  Abby? '  asked  Brad  with  a  reassuring  smile  on  his  face.44

As  she  left  the  cabin,  she  turned  and  smiled  back  at  Brad.  Her  heart  felt  so  full  now,  and  as  he  blowed  her  a  kiss  on  her  way  out  of  the door,  she  felt  as  if  her  heart  had  melted.  She  began  the  walk  back  to  the  resort.  A  funny  feeling  had  now  begun  to  irritate  her  once  more,  but  she still  could  not  figure  out  what  it  was.  She  got  to  the  front  door  of  her  house  and  walked  in  the  kitchen  to  tell  her  Mother  that  she  was  ready  to  go.  She  hated  being  away  from  Brad  but she knew  that  her  parent's  would  not  in  a  million  years  let  her  spend  any  time  in  Washington  alone.45

They  packed  all  their  stuff  and  headed  for  the  road.  Three  miles  into  the  trip  back  to  Arkansas,  as  Abby  was  starring  out  the  window, remembering  all  the  good  memories  of  her  and  Brad,  She  noticed  a  big  sign  that  said ' I  LOVE  YOU,  AND  ALWAYS  WILL '  She  thought  it  was odd  until  she  noticed  it  was  Brad  standing  outside  his  car  with  those  words  written  on  a  giant  poster board.  She  turned  around  to  look  out  the  back window  and  smiled.  She  knew  that  she  was  in  love  and  it  was  a  love  that  she  thought  could  never  be  torn  apart. 46

FOUR  MONTHS  LATER 47

Abby's  pregnancy  was  beginning  to  show.  She  was  starting  to  borrow  her  friend  Chasity's  clothes,  because  she  was  a few  sizes  bigger  than her,  and  Abby  needed  to hide  the  new  gained  weight.  She  wasn't  sure  how  much  longer  she  could  hide  it  before  her  mom  and  dad  found  out,  she also  knew  that  soon  she  would  have  to  see  a  doctor,  and  that  they  would  have  to  notify  her  parents  of  the  pregnancy  due  to  her  age.  Abby  did  not  know  if  she  should  tell  her  parents  then, or  wait  until  they  mentioned  it  and  had  her  take  a pregnancy  test.  Abby  knew  that  she  was  pregnant.  The  morning  sickness,  the  weight  gain, the missed  period,  they  were  all  signs  of  being  pregnant,  and  she  could  somehow  feel  it  as  well.48

Two  weeks  later,  Abby's  parents  took  her  to  the  Health  Center,  and  had  her  take  a  pregnancy  test.  The  result,  of  course,  came  back positive.  Their  first question  other  than  'Why?',  was  'Who?'  and  'When?'.  She  told  them  it  was  a guy  named  Brad  that  she  had  spent  time  with  at Mission  Ridge.  They  were  furious,  and  immediately  wanted  to  get  a  hold  of  him.  Abby's  parent's  called  Brad  and  asked  him  why he would  sleep  with  a  fifteen  year  old  girl.  He  had  no reasonable  explanation.49

' I  loved  her!',  Brad  said  to  Abby's  mom.  When  Brad  found  out  that  Abby  was  pregnant,  his  feelings  seemed  to  mysteriously  change.50

'So,  what  are  you  going  to  do  now?  Put  it  off  on  us?',  Asked  Abby's  mom.51

Abby  choked  back  the  tears  and  replied...  'No!  I  will  take  care  of  it  myself!' 52

'If  you  keep  that  baby,  you  better  find  another  place  to  live  because  we  can't  afford  another  mouth  to  feed!  Especially  not  because  of  your stupidity!',  yelled  Abby's  mother. 53

Abby  wrote  letters  everyday  to  Brad  but  she  never  received  anything  in  reply.  She  called  and  would  leave  messages  on  his  answering  machine but  she  never  got  any  calls.  Abby  tried  for  months  to  find  a  job  but  child  labor  laws  worked  against  her.  She  had  to  get  to  the  doctor  by  herself, and  anywhere  else  she  needed  to  go.  She  had  to  drop  out  of  school,  and  her  friends  disowned  her.  Her  parents  were  no  help,  and  always  brought her  down.  It  was  time  that  Abby  made  the  decision  she  hoped  she  would  not  have  to  make.  She  was  going  to  give  her  baby  up  for  adoption,  to  a family  that  could  take  care  of  it.  To  a  family  that  was  not  like  her own.54

Her  baby  boy,  Ethan,  was  born  seven  pounds,  twelve  ounces.  He  was  so  precious,  and  his  cries  were  the  only  comfort  Abby  had  in  months. She  looked  at  his  precious  little  face,  and  felt  the  instant  motherly love  that  is  undescribable.  A  nurse  was  standing  in  the  doorway  as  Abby  held  her baby  in  her  arms,  waiting  for  the  arrival  of  the  new  parents.  She  cried  her  heart  out  to  the  nurse,  telling  her  what  had  happened,  and  asking  her  why  it  was  her  and  her  baby,  Ethan,  who  had  to  suffer.  All Abby  was  guilty  of  was  loving someone, and  trusting  them. As  she  went  to  kiss  Ethan gently  on  the  cheek , the  doctor  came  in  followed  by  a  nicely  dressed  woman.  The  doctor  took  Ethan  from  her  arms  and  handed  him  to  the  woman. The  woman  hugged  Ethan,  and  cradled  him  in  her  arms.  The  woman  looked  up  at  the  doctor  and  spoke. 55

'I am  going  to  name  him  Bradly',  she  said  smiling.  Bradly  sounds  perfect!',  she  said  again.  56

Abby's  heart  sank,  and  she  broke  down  into  a  deeper  weep.  Everyone  around  ignored  her  cries,  and  concentrated  on  her  baby's  new  mother who  was  in  the  same  room.  Abby had  never  felt  such  pain  in  her  entire  life,  and  her  heart  was  forever  broken.  She  hated  her  parents,  she  hated Brad,  she  hated  the  world.  What  she  thought was  love, was  only  heartbreak...57

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  • LiquidLullaby
    September 5, 2005
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    Lol, even better the third time through! Thanks for entering!
    Love,
    Katy
    ~LiquidLullaby~

  • LiquidLullaby
    May 5, 2005
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    even better the second time through! Thanks for entering, glad to see you found the contest!
    Love,
    Katy
    ~*LiquidLullaby*~

  • WelshMafia
    May 4, 2005
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    This piece surprised me...I thought it would be this corny love story the whole way through...but it became a lot better for me. I actually liked it a lot by the end. ^_^ Although the ending was a bit abrupt. I would like to find out what else happens yet I think the ending fits with the story. Good luck in the contest.


  • twinklestart
    May 2, 2005
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    Wow. this is a very powerful piece. very good and very powerful. i loved the description of the cabin. it really gives an image. and i agree with someone who commented (i don't remember who it was). Brad is an ass. he should have supported Abby. this just proves what i found out the hard way. most people can not love as a teen. and NO this or something similar did not happen to me, but i have had experiences. i fell in love with a guy who later became one of my best friends. i found out he was gay. then i went out with a guy i thought i loved, nad that has a huge long story that i won't go into, but yeah, he's a jackass. so i have found out that you shouldn't love as a teen. anyway, this is a very touching piece. it really protrays the emotions. i wish that this never happens to anybody, though i know it has.


    ~Addie~

  • DistantWorld
    May 1, 2005
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    gosh this is sad. I mean, wow. It was love, than it wasn't love, and t first it was sweet, and now it's not. very good, amd I loved it. very sad.

  • spasticloser
    April 19, 2005
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    This is very touching..i have my baby still and wouldn't change it for anything..i think even if i would have got pregnant and Dusty run off I'd have still kept her..I can't imagine adoption..it makes me almost cry to think that i wouldn't have Kodi now...great great sad write...

  • LiquidLullaby
    April 7, 2005
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    This was so very true and real to every average teenager. So often we are taken up by lust, and we let it get the better of us. I love that you based your story on this, it was very easy to relate to. Thank you very much for entering
    Love,
    katy
    ~*LiquidLullaby*~

  • -BlackKnight-
    July 28, 2004
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    This story reinforces for me how stupid kids can be. I've always been raised on the principles of, "Don't have sex 'til you're married," and, "Don't get married 'til you're out of college." The girl in the story, to me anyway, was foolish for being angry at the rest of the world. She was to blame as well for having had sex with the guy anyway, so really, she should take half the blame. The fact this story got me thinking about that, I think, shows its value to the rest of society. Basically, here's the moral of it: DON'T HAVE SEX AND GET PREGNANT SO DAMN YOUNG. Good story, and good luck.

  • Pixidust
    July 22, 2004
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    Wow, this story was so sad. The ending was a bit of a surprise, and extremly sad. Parts of it were so true, about how a teenage girl who gets pregant often never sees the guy again, her family often makes her give it up, and many teen mothers do have to drop out of school. This was a great story. Please keep writing.

    ~Katie


  • KiaraDLennon
    July 19, 2004
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    I'm going to stand with the general opinion and say this story was very sad. It really is a shame that young girls get into pregnancies that they can't afford on their own and their parents don't wanna lift a finger to help. I do love the fact that you made Alicia have the baby instead of the abortion option. That's really saying something there. Great job on this story. You should really consider writing short stories and publish them someday. They're really good reads and belong in a collection. ^_^

  • Dark Angelic
    July 18, 2004
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    this is so sad. what an butthole. this is a really good story. i am wondering what gave you the idea to write this story. i hope to read more of your stories they are really good. love becca


  • Kristina
    July 18, 2004
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    BrownEyedTears,

    Your story to me meant that life is very precious. It can all end in an instant as your story mentioned at the end. For you, your story may even be deeper than that. You may have gone through this or someone you may have known. When I read your story I felt total sadness at the end as the baby died due to the fact of the cocaine found in the father's blood. As for the technical part, I found some things that you may want to change, but this is just what I think you should do but it's totally up to you, your decision. In your first sentence, you don't need a capital on 'When' as you are not starting a new sentence. Same goes as well with 'A' in the same sentence and 'Went'. In the quote with '"I love you.",' you don't need both punctuations there, either one or the other. You have this again in your story and you may want to change this as to not confuse the reader. You may want to read your story again to find these punctuation errors as you have them throughout your story. Please don't feel offended at me for pointing these out to you, I just want to make this story the best that it can be. I liked the fact that you put in 'FOUR MONTHS LATER' so the reader gets the feeling that a new plot is about to take place. Your story had great flow to it. My overall opinion of this is very sad. Something like this should not happen, not to anyone, but it does and there is not much we can do about it if people are not willing to communicate. I think you kind of ended this story very suddenly as I was expecting a bit more. You did an excellent job writing this. Keep up the good work.

    May the colours of the rainbow follow you always.

    Smiles always,
    Kristina

  • Black Diamond
    July 17, 2004
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    wow very very sad, i also hope that wasnt true :-\...all i can say, it was a good story though..keep up the great work....

    ~KM SIGLIN

  • Masked Kitty
    July 17, 2004
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    yay!

    WOW! Holy cow, that is so sad!!!! I hope that wasn't true too! Thats AWFUL! But a very good write. It's terrible that things like that happen every day...*sigh* You did a great job writing it, but I WISH IT WAS LONGER! lol I was really getting into it and then it was over...*sigh* If you DID make it longer you could make it easily into a book. Keep up the good work!

  • Touchof1der
    July 17, 2004
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    Wow! What a very engaging, but incredibly heartbreaking story. I hope this isn't true. Great job writing here. It held my attention all the way through. The beginning sounded like such a familiar scenario...one that you read about all the time, but the final stages of pregnancy and the birth of the child add new dimension to the story. Thank you for sharing it

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