Abby had been skiing for the first time at Mission Ridge Ski resort in Washington State, and now she was laying at the bottom of the ski hill squeezing her ankle in pain, wishing she had never even thought about doing this. As she tried to get up, she felt dizzy but could see the face of a stranger, who although she had never seen before, brought a sense of relief throughout her body. 1
'Are you okay?' asked a deep voice.2
'Yes, I feel dizzy and I think I have sprained my ankle but besides that, I think I will be alright ' replied Abby.3
'My name is Brad. Here, Let me help you up.' He said.4
He reached for her hand and pulled her up with all the strength he had. 'Here, rest on my shoulder.' Brad told her. ' I will take you to my place so you can warm up, it's only a mile from here, I will drive'.5
As they slowly made their way to the car, they asked each other questions and both were feeling an automatic attraction to one another. 6
'How old are you?', asked Brad.7
'I'm fifteen', replied Abby. ' How old are you?'8
' Oh, I'm nineteen. '9
'What are you doing in Washington anyway?', asked Abby.10
' I live here in Washington. I have a cabin of my own. I've been on my own for two years now.', said Brad.11
' Really?, Well, I'm just visiting. This is my mom's favorite vacation spot. We leave tomorrow afternoon though.'12
Once they arrived at the small two door car, Brad opened the door and placed her in the passenger's seat.13
'Thank you.', she said as he shut the door.14
He walked around to the drivers side of the car, got in, and within minutes they arrived at the cabin. It was beautiful. The oak that made up it's exterior was finely crafted, and the windows sparkled in the sunlight. A small smoke rose above the roof, obviously coming from a fireplace burning inside.15
' This is where I live.' He said.16
'It's beautiful!' Abby replied, still in amazement at the cabin's beauty and perfection.17
Abby walked in and she was greeted with a warm feeling of happiness. She felt comfortable for the first time in her life. She had always dreamed of having a nice guy take care of her and a beautiful place to live, with a baby that they would play with, love, and cherish. This to her, was just a miracle, it was s the setting of her dream life.18
' So, Where's your wife? ' Asked Abby, as she looked around the cabin carefully, taking in all the details to use in her dreams to come.19
' I'm not married, I'm living the single life right now.' Brad said. ' I'm waiting for that special someone.'20
Brad and Abby turned to each other and smiled. They knew that something was growing between them, and the tension and excitement grew more every minute they were together.21
' Would you like some hot chocolate?', asked Brad, pointing to the small kitchenette.22
'Sure!', replied Abby, who's young, curious eyes were now taking in every detail of Brad's body.23
Brad made some hot chocolate and accompanied it with a blanket to wrap around Abby.24
'Here you go, It's hot, and I hope you like marshmellows! '25
'You better believe it!', Abby said as she chuckled.26
Brad and Abby looked each other in the eyes and the tension was finally at it's peak. The kiss between them was inevitable, and when it happened, they could not control themselves. Being in a cabin, a romantic setting, and the feeling of love for the first time flowing through Abby's body, she was under Brad's control. He ran his hands through her hair as they kissed more passionately. His hand was now exploring elsewhere, and Abby was in a trance, under the influence of love. Almost an hour later, Abby was no longer a virgin, and neither was Brad.27
Afterwards, Abby realized that she had been gone for a couple of hours and had to get back to the ski resort before her parent's got worried enough to call the police, or something outrageous. 28
' I'm sorry, I have to go, My mom and dad would kill me if they knew that I was over here with a guy. Listen, I'm leaving tomorrow, give me your address and I will keep in touch. I had a great time, thank you for everything!' They exchanged addresses and as Abby handed hers to Brad, he kissed her hand gently.29
She walked to the cabin door and turned the knob, and then proceeded to walk through the snow a mile back to the resort. Abby had a weird feeling, but wasn't sure what it was. As she walked home with her hand's in her jacket pockets, she was hoping that her mom and dad weren't out looking for her and would catch her walking back. They didn't. When Abby reached the ski resort she walked up to her mom and said 'Hey!'30
' Where have you been young lady!? We have been looking for you everywhere!'31
' Oh, I went and put my ski's up and got a bite to eat, I was hungry.' replied Abby, trying to come up with the most believable excuse.32
'Well, You know better than to just run off like that. '33
'Yes mom, I know.' Replied Abby.34
The next morning Abby woke up and grabbed some pancakes and some toast for breakfast. She knew they would have a long ride home back to Arkansas, so before they left she wanted to see Brad just one last time.35
' I will be right back mom! I shouldn't be long '.36
'Hurry back, We are getting ready to leave'. yelled Abby's mom from the kitchen.37
Abby ran out of the door in her white sweater and sweat pants and slammed the door behind her. She jogged to Brad's house in the snow, which was a mile from her own vacation house, but to her, it was worth it. She knew it would be another year before she would see him again and so she wanted to spend as much time with him as she could. She was in love with him and she knew that he must have felt the same about her or else what happened the previous day would not have happened.38
It was a long walk to Brad's cabin, but when she arrived, she walked in to see Brad still sleeping. He had fallen asleep on his couch and didn't even hear Abby walk in. 39
' I love you...', whispered Abby in his ear.40
'What, Huh!?', Screeched Brad as he woke up from an obvious nightmare.41
' I love you, Don't you love me?' asked Abby with a sweet grin on her face.42
' Yes... I do. I didn't mean to jump up like that, I was in the middle of a nightmare...'. They looked each other in the eyes and once again could not control their hormones. This time it felt so much better to Abby, because Brad had told her she was his first. Brad was also equally excited when Abby told him the same thing. Abby had never felt love before, and had certainly never felt how sex felt before. What they shared together was special. When they were done making love for the second time, she kissed Brad on the forehead and told him that she loved him once more. ' I will keep in touch through mail, Don't forget about me!' She said, staring into his eyes as they laid down holding each other on the couch.43
' How could I ever forget about you Abby? ' asked Brad with a reassuring smile on his face.44
As she left the cabin, she turned and smiled back at Brad. Her heart felt so full now, and as he blowed her a kiss on her way out of the door, she felt as if her heart had melted. She began the walk back to the resort. A funny feeling had now begun to irritate her once more, but she still could not figure out what it was. She got to the front door of her house and walked in the kitchen to tell her Mother that she was ready to go. She hated being away from Brad but she knew that her parent's would not in a million years let her spend any time in Washington alone.45
They packed all their stuff and headed for the road. Three miles into the trip back to Arkansas, as Abby was starring out the window, remembering all the good memories of her and Brad, She noticed a big sign that said ' I LOVE YOU, AND ALWAYS WILL ' She thought it was odd until she noticed it was Brad standing outside his car with those words written on a giant poster board. She turned around to look out the back window and smiled. She knew that she was in love and it was a love that she thought could never be torn apart. 46
FOUR MONTHS LATER 47
Abby's pregnancy was beginning to show. She was starting to borrow her friend Chasity's clothes, because she was a few sizes bigger than her, and Abby needed to hide the new gained weight. She wasn't sure how much longer she could hide it before her mom and dad found out, she also knew that soon she would have to see a doctor, and that they would have to notify her parents of the pregnancy due to her age. Abby did not know if she should tell her parents then, or wait until they mentioned it and had her take a pregnancy test. Abby knew that she was pregnant. The morning sickness, the weight gain, the missed period, they were all signs of being pregnant, and she could somehow feel it as well.48
Two weeks later, Abby's parents took her to the Health Center, and had her take a pregnancy test. The result, of course, came back positive. Their first question other than 'Why?', was 'Who?' and 'When?'. She told them it was a guy named Brad that she had spent time with at Mission Ridge. They were furious, and immediately wanted to get a hold of him. Abby's parent's called Brad and asked him why he would sleep with a fifteen year old girl. He had no reasonable explanation.49
' I loved her!', Brad said to Abby's mom. When Brad found out that Abby was pregnant, his feelings seemed to mysteriously change.50
'So, what are you going to do now? Put it off on us?', Asked Abby's mom.51
Abby choked back the tears and replied... 'No! I will take care of it myself!' 52
'If you keep that baby, you better find another place to live because we can't afford another mouth to feed! Especially not because of your stupidity!', yelled Abby's mother. 53
Abby wrote letters everyday to Brad but she never received anything in reply. She called and would leave messages on his answering machine but she never got any calls. Abby tried for months to find a job but child labor laws worked against her. She had to get to the doctor by herself, and anywhere else she needed to go. She had to drop out of school, and her friends disowned her. Her parents were no help, and always brought her down. It was time that Abby made the decision she hoped she would not have to make. She was going to give her baby up for adoption, to a family that could take care of it. To a family that was not like her own.54
Her baby boy, Ethan, was born seven pounds, twelve ounces. He was so precious, and his cries were the only comfort Abby had in months. She looked at his precious little face, and felt the instant motherly love that is undescribable. A nurse was standing in the doorway as Abby held her baby in her arms, waiting for the arrival of the new parents. She cried her heart out to the nurse, telling her what had happened, and asking her why it was her and her baby, Ethan, who had to suffer. All Abby was guilty of was loving someone, and trusting them. As she went to kiss Ethan gently on the cheek , the doctor came in followed by a nicely dressed woman. The doctor took Ethan from her arms and handed him to the woman. The woman hugged Ethan, and cradled him in her arms. The woman looked up at the doctor and spoke. 55
'I am going to name him Bradly', she said smiling. Bradly sounds perfect!', she said again. 56
Abby's heart sank, and she broke down into a deeper weep. Everyone around ignored her cries, and concentrated on her baby's new mother who was in the same room. Abby had never felt such pain in her entire life, and her heart was forever broken. She hated her parents, she hated Brad, she hated the world. What she thought was love, was only heartbreak...57
THE END58
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Comments
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Lol, even better the third time through! Thanks for entering!
Love,
Katy
~LiquidLullaby~ -
even better the second time through! Thanks for entering, glad to see you found the contest!
Love,
Katy
~*LiquidLullaby*~ -
This piece surprised me...I thought it would be this corny love story the whole way through...but it became a lot better for me. I actually liked it a lot by the end. ^_^ Although the ending was a bit abrupt. I would like to find out what else happens yet I think the ending fits with the story. Good luck in the contest.
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Wow. this is a very powerful piece. very good and very powerful. i loved the description of the cabin. it really gives an image. and i agree with someone who commented (i don't remember who it was). Brad is an ass. he should have supported Abby. this just proves what i found out the hard way. most people can not love as a teen. and NO this or something similar did not happen to me, but i have had experiences. i fell in love with a guy who later became one of my best friends. i found out he was gay. then i went out with a guy i thought i loved, nad that has a huge long story that i won't go into, but yeah, he's a jackass. so i have found out that you shouldn't love as a teen. anyway, this is a very touching piece. it really protrays the emotions. i wish that this never happens to anybody, though i know it has.
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gosh this is sad. I mean, wow. It was love, than it wasn't love, and t first it was sweet, and now it's not. very good, amd I loved it. very sad.
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This is very touching..i have my baby still and wouldn't change it for anything..i think even if i would have got pregnant and Dusty run off I'd have still kept her..I can't imagine adoption..it makes me almost cry to think that i wouldn't have Kodi now...great great sad write...
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This was so very true and real to every average teenager. So often we are taken up by lust, and we let it get the better of us. I love that you based your story on this, it was very easy to relate to. Thank you very much for entering
Love,
katy
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This story reinforces for me how stupid kids can be. I've always been raised on the principles of, "Don't have sex 'til you're married," and, "Don't get married 'til you're out of college." The girl in the story, to me anyway, was foolish for being angry at the rest of the world. She was to blame as well for having had sex with the guy anyway, so really, she should take half the blame. The fact this story got me thinking about that, I think, shows its value to the rest of society. Basically, here's the moral of it: DON'T HAVE SEX AND GET PREGNANT SO DAMN YOUNG. Good story, and good luck.
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Wow, this story was so sad. The ending was a bit of a surprise, and extremly sad. Parts of it were so true, about how a teenage girl who gets pregant often never sees the guy again, her family often makes her give it up, and many teen mothers do have to drop out of school. This was a great story. Please keep writing.
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I'm going to stand with the general opinion and say this story was very sad. It really is a shame that young girls get into pregnancies that they can't afford on their own and their parents don't wanna lift a finger to help. I do love the fact that you made Alicia have the baby instead of the abortion option. That's really saying something there.
Great job on this story. You should really consider writing short stories and publish them someday. They're really good reads and belong in a collection. ^_^
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this is so sad. what an butthole. this is a really good story. i am wondering what gave you the idea to write this story. i hope to read more of your stories they are really good. love becca
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BrownEyedTears,
Your story to me meant that life is very precious. It can all end in an instant as your story mentioned at the end. For you, your story may even be deeper than that. You may have gone through this or someone you may have known. When I read your story I felt total sadness at the end as the baby died due to the fact of the cocaine found in the father's blood. As for the technical part, I found some things that you may want to change, but this is just what I think you should do but it's totally up to you, your decision. In your first sentence, you don't need a capital on 'When' as you are not starting a new sentence. Same goes as well with 'A' in the same sentence and 'Went'. In the quote with '"I love you.",' you don't need both punctuations there, either one or the other. You have this again in your story and you may want to change this as to not confuse the reader. You may want to read your story again to find these punctuation errors as you have them throughout your story. Please don't feel offended at me for pointing these out to you, I just want to make this story the best that it can be. I liked the fact that you put in 'FOUR MONTHS LATER' so the reader gets the feeling that a new plot is about to take place. Your story had great flow to it. My overall opinion of this is very sad. Something like this should not happen, not to anyone, but it does and there is not much we can do about it if people are not willing to communicate. I think you kind of ended this story very suddenly as I was expecting a bit more. You did an excellent job writing this. Keep up the good work.
May the colours of the rainbow follow you always.
Smiles always,
Kristina
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wow very very sad, i also hope that wasnt true :-\...all i can say, it was a good story though..keep up the great work....
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WOW! Holy cow, that is so sad!!!! I hope that wasn't true too! Thats AWFUL! But a very good write. It's terrible that things like that happen every day...*sigh* You did a great job writing it, but I WISH IT WAS LONGER! lol I was really getting into it and then it was over...*sigh* If you DID make it longer you could make it easily into a book. Keep up the good work! -
Wow! What a very engaging, but incredibly heartbreaking story. I hope this isn't true. Great job writing here. It held my attention all the way through. The beginning sounded like such a familiar scenario...one that you read about all the time, but the final stages of pregnancy and the birth of the child add new dimension to the story. Thank you for sharing it
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