Mike's eyes snapped open. They focused to the dim light in his best friend's apartment. Trying to get up, he collapsed back down due to an unbearably sharp pain in his forehead. Ugh, he hated hangovers.1
Suddenly, he heard a soft sound, wailing coming from the other side of the room; his friend was in tears. This wasn't completely uncommon; Matt normally broke down, but this morning was different. Mike didn't know whether it was the way he was positioned, or the huge spaces between his sobs, but clearly, something was very wrong.2
"Matt, what's up?" asked Mike sympathetically, while pushing himself up from the floor. He approached the figure who was sitting on the floor, staring at the yellowing stove.3
No response.4
Matt walked a little closer, pain still shooting through his forehead. He placed his left hand on his friend's shoulder. "What's wrong?"5
Finally Mike opened his mouth. He didn't say anything though, and quickly closed it again. Then, he turned and stared Matt right in the eye. "I hate life," he said.6
"Me too buddy," Matt replied laughing a little. His amusement didn't work on his roomate though, and soon Mike was looking away and crying once more.7
"I want you to kill me."8
Wow, Mike was completely serious. His voice hadn't broke once as he said that terrifying line. "Wh-why?" asked Matt, suddenly unaware of his hangover.9
The figure on the floor just continued to sit, staring ahead. He stopped crying, but didn't answer the questions. Minutes passed, yet the friends stayed in their exact same positions. Finally Mike stood up and turned around. He pressed his lips against his Matt as the friend stayed frozen, wondering strangely what was happening. When they broke apart, Mike looked at him and said, "That's why."10
Matt was stunned. Mike had always liked him? All those times he'd got his hopes up and didn't mean to. All those times he'd made gay jokes, though he really wasn't homophobic at all. He'd said them just to brighten his friend up at the worst of times. They'd all backfired.11
"There's a gun in my nightstand drawer. If you don't kill me, I'll kill me. I don't want to live with the long term pain anymore. I'd rather suffer it all at once. Please Matt, do this for me."12
What am I doing? He thought, as his legs carried him towards the small, wooden nightstand. He opened the drawer and found the gun, sitting beside a pair of sunglasses. Slowly, he made his way back to his friend, who seemed... happy that Matt was doing this.13
Matt raised the gun, pointing it straight ahead. He had a secret too; one that he'd never shared with the world either. He looked straight into his Mike's soul and said the first thing that rolled off his tongue, "I always loved you Mike." And then he turned the gun on himself and pulled the trigger. 14
Mike stood in a daze for a couple minutes. He stared at his lover, lying on the ground. Blood seeped out of his head, but it wasn't like he noticed. Mike Slowly bent over the dead body and kissed it once more. "I love you more," he said, and then shot himself. 15
Author notes
Okay, so I was bored and an idea popped into my head. Well, here it is, tell me what you think.
P.S. I already know it's short. You don't have to tell me that, haha.
~Kevan
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That was very sad and touching. As soon as he walked over to get the gun, I had a feeling of where it was going. I didn't, however, expect them to both kill themselves and to both love each other. Great job!
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This is cute, in a really, really morbid way lol. Really intense for such a short story, but in a good way of course.
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really powerful. thats very interesting great.
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I don't get this. They realize their in love and instead of them to live a happy life together the kill themselves? O.K
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Sadness with a twist - double suicide! I love it, it keeps you gripped right to the end. Well written.
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Ugh....
Wow, tragedy always makes a wonderfully sad story, good JOB!!!! ^_^
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OMG. I was almost in tears! WHY DID THEY HAVE TO DIE?!?!?!?
This was amazingly written, and I love it! I really love it! I'm bookmarking it!
This is awesome for "Okay, so I was bored"...
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ps.
This is sooo awesome!
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Haha, I'm really glad you liked it : D!
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wow...
that made me sad!!
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Speechless.
That was amazing...
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Haha, thanks a bunch
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I don't like that they died. Why did they have to die? If they loved each other why couldn't they go off and live happily ever after? Tears!
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wowwww.
that was amazing ._.
I could reallyyyy relate to the first section, you know
but THEN THAT TWIST
Jeezus.
Talk about trying to depress your readers.
I was expecting one of those irritating, always happens, happy endings.
AND THEN THEY SHOOT THEMSELVES?
wowwww
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Lol, I hope that means you like it
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o.o
Wow.
It took you four months to reply to my comment.
Woww.
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Very good
Really interesting...very original to me, because they both ended up dying at the end. I also really liked the dialog and I don't think it was too short, I thought it was perfect the way it was!! Anyway, good job on this!! ^.^beginning: 3, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 4, dialog: 4, characters: 3.
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Hmmmmmm
I know on all the other ones I left critical comments. Here, I'm not going to. Even I can't think of anything to moan about. Well done mate.
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this is so horrificly sad.
goodness gracious.
i really like it, though.
even though i kinda feel sick-minded to like it, it's really violent.
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OMFG! I love it... so sad! This was a great write.
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It's so sad. I hated it, not in the way that it was badly written or that it was a bad story. Just that it made me so sad. I guess saying I hated is a bad use of words because in truth I really liked it. I thought it was beautifully writte, with excellent word choice for discription that helped it flow. I just really hated that it had to end that way. But all in all wonderful job!
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eeep....this scared me. I am not a big fan of people shooting themselves...it gives me shudders. but because this gave me that feeling shows me just how good of writing this is. wonderful job.
Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
<3 Jenni-veev
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