~Now I can't breathe
No, I can't sleep
I'm barely hanging on~
There was a thunder storm outside. I could feel the electricity from it, even if I couldn’t see it or hear it. The basement around me was cold and dark, it felt humid.
~Here I am, once again
I'm torn into pieces~
Midnight...
Why am I here? Tears running down my face make little dark splashes on the cement. Why am I not asleep, safe in my bed? Because I don’t feel safe anymore...no matter where I go.
~Can't deny it, can't pretend
Just thought you were the one~
No, I can’t deny it. I really thought I loved him. I really believed it. I fell for him. I’m not afraid to admit it. After all, it wasn’t my falling in love with him that ended up breaking my heart. It was his fault. He didn’t love me back.
~Broken up, deep inside
But you won't get to see the tears I cry
Behind these hazel eyes~
I’m tore apart, I know it. I run my hands over my body. Hmm. Seems whole. So why isn’t it? I catch my reflection in the window... my hazel eyes magnified by tears. They fall now, but he won’t ever see them.
~Now all that's left of me
Is what I pretend to be~
He’s smart, but I’m a good actress. I’m ok. I’m fine. Everything’s alright In his eyes. But really all that’s left, is what I pretend to be. What I am not.
~Swallow me then spit me out
For hating you, I blame myself
Seeing you it kills me now~
He took me in, he cared for me. Then he threw me out when I fell in love with him. I hate him for that. I love him no matter though. It’s my fault I fell in love, it’s his that I got crushed.
~No, I don't cry on the outside
Anymore...~
I stopped crying around others long ago. Tears simply don’t fall. Crying in alone in the dark is a lot better than having everyone stare. I could hear the wind picking up outside.
~Here I am, once again
I'm torn into pieces~
How many nights have I spent this way...I’ve lost track. It tears me up to think about this anymore. It almost feels like the cement walls can keep out everything.
~Can't deny it, can't pretend
Just thought you were the one~
He’ll never hear me admit it, but I really thought he was the one. I look down to see what I’m fiddling with. Something heavy and dark lies in my hands. I keep tossing it from one hand to the other. Seeing what it is in the half-moon light, I smile through the tears.
~Broken up, deep inside
But you won't get to see the tears I cry
Behind these hazel eyes~
The tears have stopped now. All that’s left is a smile. I get up off the floor, and walk out the back door into the raging storm. Wind instantly blows through my hair and I’m soaked immediately. You can go a long way with a smile. You can go a lot farther with a smile and a gun.
~Broken up, deep inside
But you won't get to see the tears I cry
Behind these hazel eyes~
Author notes
Heh kinda a mix of option 1 and option 2, the quote being "You can go far with a smile. You can go a lot farther with a smile and a gun."
and the song being Behind These Hazel Eyes by Kelly Clarkson.
I guess a bit of option 5 is in there too, with a little of a cliff hanger...
Dont ask about this story...I like it. I kind of let the lyrics and the quote in mind guide me =)
~Aurora~
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- Options Inside by Taylor Renee.
500 points, ended September 16, 2007, 59 entries
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Behind These Hazel Eyes
I recognized the hazel eyes thing from the song. Creative and clever. I like your quote: "You can go far with a smile. You can go a lot farther with a smile and a gun."
beginning: 2, language: 4, plot: 5, ending: 3, dialog: 3, characters: 4.
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love it! it has so much feeling and its like...is just awesome! good luck in the contest! im entering it too, but i think your a lot better than me. btw, you should enter sailor uranus's 'if ur not from america' contest, since, like, you're from russia.
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Very well writen, but there is only one issue i have with it. Why use a pic of Bree when you could have used the GIANT PYRAMID! oh, yeah, some moron made that a movie. sorrybout that. um... yeah, i liked it, it has a very dark feel to it, and the charecters are incredebly beleavable. charecter actually.
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Aurora,
You write such heartbreaking stories and poems. I'm sometimes afraid to read the things you write. Not because they are bad, far from it, but because I never know if I'm going to cry or not.
Here is another example of your depth as a person. You got the emotions out on paper without getting too wishywashy. Wonderful. Good luck in the contest.
~*Brooke*~
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This was awesome! I love how the song works with the story. You said the picture is Bree, who is Bree? How did you think of this story?
beginning: 3, language: 5, plot: 5, ending: 5, dialog: 5, characters: 5.
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I looove this. I love that quote its one of my faves and OMG you did such a good job with this!!!
Thank you sooo much!!!
I really loved it!!
FInalist in my opinion
Thank you sooo mcuh for entering the contest!!!
xoxo
tay
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Yeah, i know the pics blurry. its supposed to be. Btw, thats Bree in the pic. Bree...dont hurt me >.< i thought it was kinda fitting...
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