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Just a brainstorm, 1st draft for a short film:2
Ann is dressed as a ragdoll, but her clothes are dark and goth like, her faces is corpsey.3
1 scene: Ann sitting under very creepy tree w/ a book. Everything 4
around her looks dead and burned hues are set to auburn +very cloudy+5
::Music is slow, creepy piano music::6
Camera slowly zoom in looks like its going into her eye but quickly drops (like a fall) into the book.7
----Jumps to----8
Scene 2: in Black and white Ann and Andy are sitting in a shop window,9
leaning on each other, dressed normal, smiling10
(Little girl peaks through window, nose against the glass)11
---little girl rushes in, (dressed girly like, pigtails) 12
looks around, reaches over grabs ann (sqeels) 13
*in the process, andy falls through the cracks of the shelf.*14
Little girl-Mommy, I NEED her!! Please, please, please!! Please! (pulls on her mother's skirt hem, very antsy, waving Ann all around.) 15
Mother-(on cell phone and suit, not listening to little girl)-Yes yes, here. (hands little girl a 20)16
Little girl squeels, hands store owner the 20 17
Store owner tries to tell the little girl that Ann is only 6.50 18
(Little girl not listening runs out skipping, hugging Ann) 19
(Mother casually follows out)20
Zoom into Ann, She tries to reach out to Andy, calls his name21
::Little girl and mother enter car, Ann is thrown on middle seat:: 22
(Ann tries to call Andy one more time, looks back doesn't see him in window, all color runs from Ann's face,)23
-Little girl struggles to get Ann buckled in as Anns head falls-24
Scene 3: Switch back too origdinal hue25
::camera zooms out of book::26
Returns to Ann sitting at tree, now crying27
(Ann closes book, lays down, curls up)28
leaves russle, Thin layer covers Ann29
::Camera zooms out a bit, all you can see is Ann's white hand::30
::Camera zooms out farther, scopes area, zooms into alley way, walking out is Andy::31
+Andy, dressed similar to Ann, goth/punk like, has tatoos,32
Spiked clothing, ect.)33
(takes drag on cigerette, stomps it out, walks along sidewalk, stops stares at sky camera zooms into his eyes)34
Scene 4: Black and white Just like scene 235
(Andy laying in dark, cobwebs everywhere, struggling to get out) 36
Andy-Ann (calls out)37
(gets up calls out again, stumbles, tries to climb back up)38
Ann calls*39
(Andy clumsily and quickly climbs back up to store window, hangs on by his arms, sees Ann turn away from store.)40
::All color fades from Andy's face::41
(Lets go of ledge, falls back into darkness)42
Scene 5: ::Zooms out of Andy's eye:: 43
(looks hurt but trying to be tough) -Walks faster right past the tree Ann is sitting at, disappears-44
Author notes
This is a screenplay for a movie I'm working on w/ me cousin Katie (fantasticzealot) PLEASE COMMENT!!!!!!!!!!!
What did you think? Please comment!
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Umm . . . If I'm going to turn this into a screenplay (which I very well will if you don't mind), I'm kinda gonna need a plot (This seemed more like a collection of scenes than a beginning of a movie)
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thanks so much!!!! thats really helpful!! i dont have a clue how scripts work so thanks a ton!
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potentially eery
Pretty good.
Just a few tips, though:
Instead of "jump to" you should put "cut to". That's just kinda the way scripts go.
The typical way of doing dialogue is like this:
ANDY
Ann!
Except the name should be indented half way across the page and the line should be about 3/4 of that (and blocked).
or
LITTLE GIRL
Mommy, I NEED her!! Please, please, please!! Please!
She pulls on her mother's skirt hem, very antsy, waving Ann all around.
New scenes (in movie scripts) begin like this:
12 EXT. TREE - NIGHT
or something to that effect.
You list the scene number, whether it's interior or exterior, the location, then the time (usually something like NIGHT, DAY, MORNING, DUSK, or something to that effect).
Oh. You want to begin a new scene every time you change sets. You can either make it broad like "HOUSE" if you want there to be a long, tracking shot moving from room to room, or you can make it specific like BEDROOM if you want it in a confined space. Then, if the character exits the bedroom, you want to change the scene to HALL or BATHROOM or something if there's a new shot out there.
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Oooh, pretty good, you really wanted to put the emphasis on details in the backround right? Well, it was great and I hope to read more of it.
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you have taken a lot of time and thought to prepare this "scenario"..I can see that with work and time you could create a plausible play or movie.....be sure and always run spell check when you finish a piece and keep on writing...freda
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