He parted her.1
He simply left her with no goodbye, leaving no reason at all.2
He told her he still loved her but the love he felt now is different from the love he felt for her ten years ago. 3
"Love with no passion is like a candle with no flames!".4
Those words tore her into a million piece. She felt as if a part of her own body was being taken away from her. She felt as if her heart was being crushed into a million piece. 5
She was lost. Nothing to do. Nothing to say.6
What more could she say? She had him around for as long as she could remember and now he deserted her. 7
She sat near her window watching him blend with people in the street, watching him grow smaller and smaller. Smaller until she could no longer see him. He disappeared and she just sat there watching and wishing for him to return just like a child wishing upon a blurry star. 8
He left her all his clothes. all his books. 9
His cologne still lingers around the apartment as if he had done it intentionally so she'd never forget he was there. So she'd never forget he was a part of her world. 10
Everyone thought she must be enduring so much pain.. That she would be going through a terrible, horrible ache. 11
" What a poor woman! It must be rough for her to go on living in a house in which resides all sort of unbearable memories.. She must want to avoid hearing all those meaningless condolences- those which only made her want to burry her pain even deeper.."12
The world was just too ugly for her to face and the agony of life was just too heavy.. She had lost the chance of seeing him once more.. The chance of feeling his skin next to hers but she still kept a tiny sparkle of hope inside her bruised heart.13
It was all ruined for her now.. Even truth seemed to be untrue.14
Two years have gone now and Emma is still awaiting by her window.. 15
The little lady with the doll face is still there, watching the sunbeams cross her dirty window. Still thinking of him often, still awaiting his return. 16
Just like inside her heart, outside, it was cold and rainy. 17
Two years: Twenty four months since she'd last left her apartment.18
She was sitting there watching people go back and forth across the street, remembering how she had watched him grow smaller when the door bell rang.. 19
Under normal circumstances, Emma wouldn't have left her chair, but something about the way the door was being knocked seemed familiar..20
She ran to the door, thinking it was him, Alexis, her lost love..21
The image of the man standing at her door mat seemed like someone she'd known..: 22
A tall tanned young man with silky black hair and baby blue eyes that seemed to shiny even brighter than the sun.. His hands.. his lips.. 23
Emma approached him thinking it was the man who deserted her two years ago.. But it wasn't him.. It wasn't Alexis.. 24
She had missed that little detail.. For her, her world started spinning once again and her wounds have been mended.. Her life was her own again! 25
Every morning, she'd prepare his breakfast the way Alexis loved it.. she'd iron his clothes, clean the house, go grocery shopping, she had even started to grow flowers again. Most of her time was his, and he didn't seem to dislike that. The poor man could do nothing about it but surrender.26
Emma was madly in love. She had never felt a love so amazing. She even mistook the past for the present and confused God with destiny.. but deep down inside she knew he wasn't the man she thought he was.27
Dave was a well mannered man, he was brave and courageous. He knew when and how things needed to be done. He was a man of broad horizons.28
He was an orphan. His father died when he was barely three months old and his mother died of grief for her dead husband. 29
He barely gained his living by selling door-to-door make up products and had no idea his life would turn upside down when he knocked on Emma's door to sell her the latest shade of red. 30
Of all passioned hearts and broken souls, why did it have to be him standing at her door?31
On sunny morning, Emma woke him up saying they have to go for a walk, “it's such a beautiful weather outside” .32
She had worn her long white dress that made her angelic figure shine brighter and him, as usual, wore his blue jeans and an old white sweater. 33
Even though there were big differences between them, they did make a great couple. 34
Dave admired her beauty and she admitted his sense of humor and honorable manners.. When he looked into her golden eyes, a million riddles seemed to wander his mind but all seemed mean less when she pronounced his name.. and it made him smile.. The aspects of her figure gave birth to vagabond fantasies that started with a simple question and ended with her understanding all his thoughts with a simple gesture.. 35
Dave noticed no strange trait of the strange world in Emma's eyes as he was contemplating her beauty laying next to him on the fresh green grass under the big oak tree.. 36
"You know, Emma, I need to talk to you, I got so many things on my mind.."37
Dave had a delicate voice tone but saying those words made it sound different.. 38
"Go ahead.." she said with a bright tone.. 39
"Amongst the wild secrets of my heart, while I was searching for the woman by whom I could be understood, I found you in a whole different world.. As if you were living on the other side of the planet, in your old golden cage.. Such a perfect creature having the possession of something sacred.. One of the women who inspired me and awoke inside my mind the thoughts of love, the thoughts of loving someone.. It has taken me so much time and I've put so much strength into this.. 40
I let myself go, delivering it to the most sacred pleasures and the most profound passions.. Just to let you know JE T'AIME*.."41
Emma looked at him with eyes full of love.. She leaned closer to him, reached for his hand and said: 42
"It has been so many years now and so many desires kept inside of me.. Shades of passions so vague and so profound.. So fugitive and so outrageous that I have no words to describe the beauty of the happiness I've felt with you.. You have brought me back to life after I was sinking into thoughts of a world lost in darkness.. You have revived in me thoughts that were dead long ago and my heart bows for you..43
You came to me when my soul was so young to conceive the melancholy of despair.. You knew how to find in me more than a woman.. With you I have known what is the grand happiness that could make a man and a woman madly in love.. To crave for your gesture, your words, the sound of your laughter.. You have awakened in me the greatest love of all.."44
She barely finished her sentence and Dave held her in his arms and whispered to her: 45
' I love you.. I love a love that's brighter than the blue skies, bigger than the biggest hope.. A love that we cling unto, for the thought of losing it is just too sad.."46
She felt a strange feeling run into her, a feeling that made her forget about her pain every time she heard him say he loved her.. She had waited for him so long and he was finally there.. 47
She held him tightly close to her body, feeling strange but shining from grace despite that.. 48
Dave felt nothing anymore.. He saw the blood run down from his heart.. 49
'Mon amour* said the woman with the doll face, how I loved you.. I could have never been able to survive without you.. I would've followed you anywhere.. To the end of the world, we would've crossed all oceans, conquered the universe and even grasped the moon.. I would've even caught the stars for you.." 50
Emma loved Alexis so much that she mistook the man who abandoned her two years ago and had no drop of passion for her for the man who was willing to give up everything to see her smiling.. 51
It's true.. Love with no passion is like a candle without flames.. but too many flames could end up burning your heart.. 52
Author notes
*I love you
**My love
Emma: a french name meaning loving, caring.. in the story it's used to mark the way she loves, which ended by killing her love..
The translation isn't as good as the original one, I had to let go of so many descriptions cause they didn't sound right in english.. Well as they say, translation just looses all the romantic and meaningful words..
Many thanks to Night Hope who helped me do a review on this
*Nour-*
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Beautiful
Ah I wish I could speak your language, read everything in the original, instead of having to read it in plain old english, I berate myself for never learning more languages, how can I consider myself a poet and a word smith when I can not even understand a huge fraction of the words out there. This was a beautiful sad story, did Emma kill him? to make him stay? or did he just die? Yes I know about being burned in the passion, you let things go and soon love can turn into a long train af abuses. Great story I hope I can find more translated ones to read.
~kar
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Awe-inspiring
This is beautiful in a way that so many things cannot be. I'm very glad that you bothered to translate, and I'm almost positive it's five times more wonderful in french, because I've found some things in the english language lose meaning in the way that they don't in other languages. I am however going to beg you to correct the punctuation- you use no commas, whatsoever, and the only type of punctuation used is '..' which isn't even a full elipses and is therefor improper. I wish you would fix that because it detracts from the overall read. Also the _' before the dialogue is improper, so I'd suggest removing it.
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This was really good. Meaningful. I'm sorry some of the descriptions were lost. English sucks. But I would also like to bid you good luck with the contest.
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This was so romantic. I felt bad for Emma and the fact that she lost Alexis, but I am glad that she decided to give David a chance. Wonderful story - truly inspiring. Good luck with the contest.
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Beautiful
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Excellent
Amazing work honey, reading this just took me there. This is a definte winner. Best of luck in the contest.
I love you baby girl.
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no comment!
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I can't read French so I can't comment on the translation... but the story is well written, I enjoyed reading it... thanx for sharing...
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great
this is great and the text colour really matches with those flowers!great thanx for sharing! -
This was very well written, and I liked how the story has evolved from the middle to end. I agree with you that some translations lose part of what we really mean in our own language, I have the same problem as I translated a poem from Portuguese to English. But this one of yours is really good!
Mari
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wowzer. she be jammin' now!!! lol
Ok, um, let's see 'diplomacy', huh? (OK, so I really WASN'T finished, was I?!? lol) Honestly, my Friend, this story is stunning in its complex simplicity! It is full of generous, sensual, open & tender LOVE. That's all I can determine here...pure, unadulterated LOVE...very nice, indeed...& MOST refreshing to see & read & FEEL!...swan 
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She Sings Love Beautifully
{bows low & elegantly, swinging all hats off head, in gesture of admiration & respect}...M'Lady...(no 'babygirl' in 'dis one!NONE 't all! lol)...may I just say how wonderful ALL of your aspects are...how brightly they shine...how truly gifted, talented & lovely you are, my dear Friend...wow. WHAT a WRITE/TRANSLATION!!! I am SO VERY PROUD of you...your brilliance of Heart & sharpness of Mind is revealed with an elaborate flourish...(good girl! lol)...I am quite impressed, both with this particular piece & with you in general...*My Friend*...I would like to tell you, without any sort of illusions presented whatsoever, that YOU GIVE ME HOPE FOR THE FUTURE, my Friend. TRULY you do. I am honoured to be called your Friend...& grateful for the opportunity to have known you & seen your talents exhibited first hand. ALL THIINGS WONDERFUL ON THE WING TO MY FRIEND...lol...can you kinda, almost, tell that I liked it a little bit, around the edges? ...sweetie, you are so very amazing to my eyes, my heart!...a bouquet for the LadyPoet...
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EXCELLENT!!!!!
The last line is very powerful.....you should use that in a poem as well....or even a one-liner.......anyway, I really liked this story....I hate that Emma lost Alexis, but I am happy and proud of her for giving David a chance.....this a very deep, heart-filled write with tons of emotions that are free-flowing....and I'll say it again....the last line is just awesome!!!!.... Also, the part, "Love with no passion is like a candle with no flame!"…..is just an absolute truth....what purpose does the candle (love) serve?.......this is a very, VERY wonderful, creative, and thought-provoking piece......nice work...... ~~~~~~~~~~~~Stephanie~~~~~~~~~~
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what canm i say other than..... WOW!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Excellent
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Oh my goodness....so freaking good!!
Damn....that is all i can say really...I mean this write was so full of beautiful description and passion like no other story i have read...It flowed together like water from a stream, clean and clear...just lovely....You really did a wonderful job on this....
again really really great write...
Love ya sissy...
Keep it up..
Heather
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My sister the bestest
Nour this is so romantic. You are so smart the way you translate things to english. I don't even know spanish, my mom tries to show me. Love you my big sister -
Wow, this was written originally in French, right? I could most likely understand most of it if it was...Darn I'd have loved to read the original...I love the title, it's so romantic. Does it mean something along the lines of "To love that has died?" (I'm a little rusty on my French, haven't used it for some time.) Beautiful write, I can only imagine how wonderful it must be in French.
-morgana
Edited on Jul 16, 8:49 because ''.
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