“Mommy,” I murmured, poking her with a tentacle, “did we always live here?”
“Hmm?”
“Here, on the moon,” I repeated impatiently, “Did we always live here?”
“Of course, Hon,” my mother said, stroking my violet cheek.
“Today Timmy said our ancestors lived on,” I struggled to remember the unfamiliar word, “Ear…Earth.”
“Oh, yes, Earth,” she sighed, “It was taken over.”
“By what?” I asked, eager to hear more.
She waved her pincer absently, as if brushing away worries, “Fast food, global warming, politics…”
I nodded as if I understood, “Hmm.”
“So we ended up here and evolved into what we are today.”
“Aliens?”
“MmmHmm.”
A contest entry
- A Challenge for Good Writers. Lots of options. by creativediva.
145 points, ended June 21, 2007, 4 entries
Honorable mention
• next story in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I like this story short or not short!
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I agree with Seth, perhaps you should try and make this longer. But, for the shortness of it you got the message across. I didn't really like the crack about global warming, but overall I liked it.
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This is incredibly short, but still gets the basic humorous point across. Nonetheless, I feel that it is far too short of a story. Try expanding on it a bit. Good luck in the contest.
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